Agree or disagree? Classmates are a more important influence than parents on a child’s success in school
Classmates always play crucially important roles in our entire life. This raises the question of whether classmates are a more important influence than parents on a child’s success in school. My view is that classmates actually will bring us a more imperative influence than parents on a child’s success in school.
First of all, I would take the position that classmates’ thoughts are closer to our situation. Learning classmates’ ideas can make us closer to success in school. For example, when I was an elementary school student, I once encountered a tough problem with how to learn English more efficiently in class. I tried to use a couple of study methods to help me improve this tough situation, but I failed to solve this problem many times. Finally, I actively sought help from one of my classmates, and he gave me some greatly beneficial suggestions, like using some learning tools on the Internet or doing some practical oral practices with other people, and I immediately followed his approach to improve my English learning. A few months later, other classmates all praised that I had a highly significant progression in English ability, and I get an A+ grade this semester. By contrast, if we just ask parents for help, their opinions may not fit our situation perfectly.
Second, We can learn the spirit of teamwork from classmates. In order to succeed in school, learning teamwork is a must. For instance, when I was ten years old, the school held a soccer game, and we all lacked enough teamwork experience with other people. Thus, we had to diligently learn how to cooperate with classmates to win a sports game from scratch. Initially, we had a lot of severe conflicts because we didn’t understand each other, but we constantly improved these arduous issues and industriously boosted our soccer skills gradually through pieces of training. A couple of weeks later, we already realized how to perfectly collaborate with partners, and we could utilize some thoroughly familiar tactics to beat other extraordinary rivals. Finally, we won the first prize in this soccer game. In contrast, we may not be able to learn teamwork with parents by participating in a sports game.
To sum up, these are the two reasons why I hold the belief that classmates are a more important influence than parents on a child’s success in school. Classmates can give some excellent recommendations to us, and we can also learn a lot of valuable teamwork experiences with classmates. I am of the view that classmates’ influence can make us have a more positive and brighter future.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 82, Rule ID: WHETHER[3]
Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: whether; the question whether
...t roles in our entire life. This raises the question of whether classmates are a more important influen...
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Line 5, column 330, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a sport' or simply 'sports'?
Suggestion: a sport; sports
...how to cooperate with classmates to win a sports game from scratch. Initially, we had a ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, finally, first, if, may, second, so, thus, for example, for instance, in contrast, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2167.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 433.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00461893764 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56165014514 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92779442974 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.519630484988 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 655.2 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.86738351254 428% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.7377172256 48.9658058833 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.19047619 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.619047619 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.04761904762 5.45110844103 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.291502692585 0.236089414692 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116492149007 0.076458572812 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.174331204831 0.0737576698707 236% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.274875935794 0.150856017488 182% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.22326604435 0.0645574589148 346% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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