Agree or disagree with the following statement.
The products seem much better on the advertisements.
Use specific details and examples.
An advertisement is the most common way to view the product to many people using television and the internet. Some people believe that the products are much better in the commercials than in real life. On the other hand, others think the exact opposite of it. From my point of view, products seem ideal in the advertisement even though they are not.
First of all, the companies show only the pros of the product, not the cons. Moreover, a team of people works in a commercial to make it perfect without any mistake. One of the most common examples of this is the advertisement of burger king. They always showed that it is the cheapest way to get high-quality food even though it is unhealthy. Also, many candy companies show their product to help people to get out of stress even though those are harmful to teeth.
Secondly, an advertisement is the only difference of the products between two companies which sell the duplicate type of product. Because with the help of the technology, the quality of those products has only slight difference despite which company's is it. As a result, the companies focus more on the advertisements to show that their product has more beneficial for people. For example, when I choose between two products which are rarely used such as cakes, I watch the commercials of products to get familiar with the pros of the product and decide what to buy.
All in all, because the advertisement is the crucial factor of people's decision, companies use it as their chance to show the pros of the product. However, anything is ideal which makes the advertisement seem unreal.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, for example, such as, as a result, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 9.8082437276 0% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 13.8261648746 14% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 43.0788530466 46% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1333.0 1977.66487455 67% => OK
No of words: 279.0 407.700716846 68% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.77777777778 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08696624509 4.48103885553 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68032306929 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 137.0 212.727598566 64% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.491039426523 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 411.3 618.680645161 66% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.9437230575 48.9658058833 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.8666666667 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.26666666667 5.45110844103 152% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.125118565096 0.236089414692 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0478056758555 0.076458572812 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0407471323732 0.0737576698707 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.08061917302 0.150856017488 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0390860985373 0.0645574589148 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.25 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 86.8835125448 55% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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