Agree or disagree? In order to succeed, you should be more like others than be different from everyone else.
This topic leads me to think of an impressive story that I have experienced several years ago when I was still an undergraduate this raises the question of whether we should be more like others than be different from everyone else in order to succeed. My view is that we should establish an unique life story which belongs to us rather than just following other people’s path.
First of all, we should not be more like others than be different from everyone else in order to succeed because if we just imitate other people’s life experiences or thoughts, we can not develop our own interests. For instance, I liked to attend a variety of activities that I was truly interested in rather than most people would participate in because I could spend my time doing what I really want to finish and get some valuable experiences that can apply in my future career. When I was an undergraduate, I attended a football team that most students would lack interest in interest. However, I could immerse myself in the football games that I really enjoyed and learn how to establish excellent teamwork with my teammates. By that, I can use this kind of experience to resolve some arduous issues which I will encounter in the future and succeed in the field I work in.
Second, we should not be more like others than be different from everyone else in order to succeed because if we just follow other people’s steps, we will not be able to meet people who will really fit our personality best. For example, when I was eighteen years old, I participated in a service club that most people would not spend their time joining actively. Yet, we spent our time helping disadvantaged groups solve the difficulties they encountered in their life and teaching them other practical life skills. With this chance, I could expand my network and broaden my vision, and these friends would also give me a hand when I face some difficulties which I could not solve by ourselves, and that can make my career more successful.
To conclude, these are the two reasons why I hold the belief that we should not be more like others than be different from everyone else in order to succeed because we can only find out our own interests and meet people who will really fit our personality perfectly by developing our life journey rather than following other people’s steps, and these two reasons will really make our life more successful.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 141, Rule ID: WHETHER[3]
Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: whether; the question whether
... was still an undergraduate this raises the question of whether we should be more like others than be d...
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Line 1, column 289, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...ed. My view is that we should establish an unique life story which belongs to us r...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, really, second, so, still, for example, for instance, kind of, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 9.8082437276 234% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 70.0 43.0788530466 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2000.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 423.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.72813238771 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53508145475 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60643846132 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.446808510638 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 624.6 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 35.0 20.1344086022 174% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 80.6247739015 48.9658058833 165% => OK
Chars per sentence: 166.666666667 100.406767564 166% => OK
Words per sentence: 35.25 20.6045352989 171% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.41666666667 5.45110844103 154% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.366786222609 0.236089414692 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.148497631053 0.076458572812 194% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.177872957322 0.0737576698707 241% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.287330148787 0.150856017488 190% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0460326222794 0.0645574589148 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.5 11.7677419355 157% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.41 58.1214874552 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 10.1575268817 156% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.75 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 10.002688172 180% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.0 10.0537634409 159% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.247311828 156% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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