agree or disagree
getting a job by the influence of others
By and large, in all societies even between primary humans, there have been some privileged people and some inferior people. Nowadays, competition, in order to get a job, is prevailing, and some people use their influence and help the privileged group. I personally disagree with this way of finding a job because of two reasons.
First, as a recommended person does not have enough knowledge and information, he or she brings about reducing productivity and capability of a company. In other words, If those individuals were able to get the job by their abilities, they would not need a recommendation of another person. In addition, the individuals having a potent influence can change the destiny of a company and a recommended person both simultaneously towards collapse and prosperity, respectively. As a mentioned individual empowers with influence of a recommending person, the owner of the company cannot fire him or her because of their inadequate knowledge. Owing to their inadequacy and deficient knowledge, the company cannot be boosted in comparison of their rivals and lags far behind the rest of companies on the way of development. Due to this disaster rendered into a company, an aforementioned company cannot keep progressing and pace with other competitors so will be about to collapse completely.
Second, other people observing inequality in their society, because once an unqualified person gets a job, will get disappointed and depression. An educated person from a high ranking university expects that he or she will immediately become absorbed as a workforce. In fact, they have an ambitious thought when they are studying so that have made a concerted effort in the dream of a brilliant future. When an enlightened person looking for a job after graduation from a university encounters inequality because of seeing a person who is not specialist in his or her major was able to get that position based on some reason, he or she will get anxiety and lose his or her self-esteem. For instance, after graduation from college, I was searching for a job pertaining to my major in which I am expertise. Unfortunately, a guy with irrelevant major got that position in advance, so I gave up with depression and made a decision to leave my country and find a job in another country because I felt that I will not fulfill my dreams as long as influence and power work instead of knowledge and educations.
In conclusion, giving a job to an unqualified person brings about a reduction of productivity of our companies. Furthermore, not only do individuals get depression after facing this inequality, they but also give up with disappointment.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, look, second, so, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, by and large, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2235.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 439.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09111617312 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57737117129 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.17195049121 2.67179642975 119% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507972665148 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 729.0 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 55.3475961663 48.9658058833 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.470588235 100.406767564 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.8235294118 20.6045352989 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.76470588235 5.45110844103 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.141105328989 0.236089414692 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.051483969746 0.076458572812 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0462564987536 0.0737576698707 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0880469346718 0.150856017488 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0257768485742 0.0645574589148 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 11.7677419355 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 58.1214874552 65% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.58 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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