Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
“Overall, the widespread use of the internet has a mostly positive effect on life in today's world." Use reasons and details to support your opinion.
The wide world of the internet introduced our life into an amazing experience that people have never seen before. Ideologists believe that people are fascinated with this brilliance opportunity because of the multitude of information to which they are exposed. I strongly believe that the internet exposes us to different platforms in order to be aware of our surrounding world. I have at least two reasons which I will explain in the following paragraphs.
First, many information and data on the internet provide democracy and freedom for every individual throughout the world. Before, most of the politicians have thought that they have the power to do everything then by giving bribe to journalism in order to conceal their corruption. However, today people are keeping up with all news even in a remote place in the polar regions. In other words, no longer can a principal or mayor a town give and take a bribe to hide misbehavior. Moreover, People are empowered by a potent weapon so-called smart sell-phones. In addition, many independent journals are working on the news and informed of even an infinitesimal corruption and shortcoming of politicians. For instance, a government in my county took bribe and gave permission to an illegal company. Meanwhile, an investigative journalist learned the event and revealed all details of this corrupted transaction. Owing to this scandal, the government had to resign immediately.
Second, by the power of the internet, individuals have strengthened to ask their right in society because they can get information from a different source and become aware of their social right. Awareness of their right contributed to the socialized relationship makes a willpower in an individual’s mind to help suppressed people all over the words. To cite this claim for good, I can give an example of my country voting in the last years. Voters found out that cheating happened, and a popular candidate failed in the election. In the virtual world, by e-voting, everybody knew that he would get the first place. On the other hand, he lost the competition. By floating this news on the internet and different platforms, voter got informed that this is a prominent right for every single individual to ask “where is my vote?”. By this widespread news and information, the government got an incentive to find cheater, and finally, the popular president was assigned. Had people not gotten access to the internet, they would not have gotten back their right.
In conclusion, the internet is associated with a wide variety of information exposing people to a beautiful life. Not only does the internet provide democracy, but it also gives back people’s right in some situations.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 8, Rule ID: MANY_FEW_UNCOUNTABLE[2]
Message: Use 'much' or 'little' with uncountable nouns.
Suggestion: much; little
...in the following paragraphs. First, many information and data on the internet pr...
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Line 3, column 123, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Before” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... every individual throughout the world. Before, most of the politicians have thought t...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, may, moreover, second, so, then, while, at least, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2299.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 443.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18961625282 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58776254615 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0366233519 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.532731376975 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 728.1 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.978774607 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.7916666667 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4583333333 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.875 5.45110844103 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.109456168423 0.236089414692 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.031245544653 0.076458572812 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0283643210832 0.0737576698707 38% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0791659581685 0.150856017488 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0232864357009 0.0645574589148 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.7 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 86.8835125448 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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