Agree/Disagree:It's better for children choose jobs that are similar to their parent' jobs than to choose job that are very different from their parents' jobs.
The desire for success has permeated every realm of human life from childhood to adulthood. For many people, success simply translates to have a good job and be thriving in it. Although everybody has a unanimous consensus about the significance of the future job, there is a controversy surrounding the optimum job. Many think continuing the parent jobs is the best option for children, while others disagree. From my perspective, there are pros and cons for each statement, to be sure, by overall, the positive side of the similar works between children and their parents outweigh. In the following paragraphs, I express two conspicuous reasons to elaborate on my standpoint.
First and foremost, by continuing the experience of a parent's job, offspring can utilize their experience, properly. The experience is the best teacher for every human being, but it is wiser to use other people experience. We do not need to reinvent the wheel; we can easily use the experience of people who have down the route we want traveling, and if these people will be our parent, the people we can be easily remain in touch with them, it makes the long distance, short. For example, one of my friends and I separately stated new company that our purpose was to produce shoes. I did not use anybody advice at that time; on the other hand, my friend had a dull time consulter who was his father. His father was working in a shoe company for years. I was oblivious to this fact, and I astounded by my increasing progress., while I stuck in a bad situation. His father helped him a lot in that works from introducing him to successful in that area to other details. This example embodies the linear relation between using other experiences, especially our parents, and being prosperous in our job.
In the second place, with the assistance of our parents, we can start our work sooner. It is not surprizing that the works which our parents do every day can be easily learned. If we want to do the same works our parents do, we are more prone to learn it in a shorter time. In this way, we can get our economic dependency, sooner, and, in turn, it can afford use to be more self-confident and self-reliant person. For instance, I have a close friend that continue his father job when he was. This works not only brought him about to be a very successful person but also no one can guess he is in his 20's. Sometimes, I thought to myself; if I had had the same job with my father, I might have had a better confidant. This example illustrates that self-reliant personality, which is the fruit of earning dependency, and continuing our parent's job is positively correlated. The sooner we start our own job, by help of our parents, the more we can rely on ourselves.
In the final analysis, based on the reasons have mentioned above, continuing the parent's job not only does it help children to be more blossom in their future career, but also it affords them to gain better personalities. If you want to cast doubt on my reason, start to read biography of successful people that had the same jobs with their parents. You will be surprise when you know how many of them exist.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, while, as to, for example, for instance, you know, in the second place, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 15.1003584229 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 83.0 43.0788530466 193% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2597.0 1977.66487455 131% => OK
No of words: 561.0 407.700716846 138% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.62923351159 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.86676880123 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69112035082 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 261.0 212.727598566 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.465240641711 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 813.6 618.680645161 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 21.0 9.59856630824 219% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 12.0 4.94265232975 243% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.4967794402 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.1851851852 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7777777778 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.55555555556 5.45110844103 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 11.8709677419 177% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198976028088 0.236089414692 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0663019723469 0.076458572812 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0647368633134 0.0737576698707 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154911774687 0.150856017488 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0760867321674 0.0645574589148 118% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.57 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 86.8835125448 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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