If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying
The desire for success has permeated every realm of human life ranging from childhood to adulthood. For many individuals this desire simply translated to have a good job. Although everybody has a unanimous consensus about the significance of the choosing a job, there is a controversy surrounding the optimum way to reach this target. Many claims it is wiser to choose a secure job when it is offered to us, while others speculate that we should not accept the job until we find a satisfying job. From my perspective, there are pros and cons to each statement, but overall, the positive side of the first statement outweigh. In the following paragraphs, I express two conspicuous reasons to elaborate on my standpoint.
First and foremost, getting the secure job makes the life easier. When people refuse to accept the opportunity of the secure job, they inevitably should face its consequences which can affect on different aspects of life. The people who are more ambitious to get a secure job are more prone to have a life full of stress and anxiety. Indeed, many studies have conducted in this way, and all show that the individuals who have these personalities are more prone to get depression, are less have an optimistic attitude toward the life. For instance, I can remember four years ago, my brother graduated from a top university, and he was searching to find an appropriate job. Unfortunately, his trial was not successful, and he could not find the job that he desired, on the other hand, he refused to work in a lower position. I remember that the life of my brother was a nightmare at that time. He irritated himself and ours. This example embodies there is a linear relationship between life satisfaction and having a good and secure job, even its not the job we desired.
In the second place, with accepting the second job, it affords us to get the better job in the future. Nowadays, the experience is the important element in the workforce. It is obvious that the best way to have a practical knowledge is to engage with problems that are similar in the workforce, which is the prerequisite to get a desirable job, to have experience in other works. In better words, a job, even it does not look desirable, can well-prepare us for the better, more satisfying future job. For instance, I remember when I was graduated from college, I started a training program. At that time, the company did not pay much money to me and even worse, I did not like the works the company did, but I thought to myself, it might help me to have a better resume for my future. To make a long story short, I after some time I inquire for my desirable position, and fortunately, I get that. Later on, I asked my boss about the reason he chooses me over the others. He answered, your resume was almost equal to two other people, and your difference was just about your work experience. I might not have gotten the position if I had not involved in that training experience.
In the final analysis, based on the reasons have mentioned above, getting the secure job not only does it help us to have a more relaxed life but also it provides us better chance to have our desirable work in the future. If you cast doubt about on my points, I can invite you some night to my home and talk to my brother and me; it will clear up your doubts, I bet!
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'effect'?
Suggestion: effect
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Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
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Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'practical knowledge'.
Suggestion: practical knowledge
...It is obvious that the best way to have a practical knowledge is to engage with problems that are sim...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, second, so, well, while, for instance, in the second place, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 83.0 43.0788530466 193% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 72.0 52.1666666667 138% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2742.0 1977.66487455 139% => OK
No of words: 600.0 407.700716846 147% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.57 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.94923200384 4.48103885553 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67334788026 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 275.0 212.727598566 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.458333333333 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 901.8 618.680645161 146% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 24.0 9.59856630824 250% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.7635924965 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.555555556 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2222222222 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.88888888889 5.45110844103 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.308109344654 0.236089414692 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0884533769277 0.076458572812 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0850410230547 0.0737576698707 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.195413920904 0.150856017488 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0592821944424 0.0645574589148 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.52 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.86 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 86.8835125448 137% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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