Young people nowadays do not give enough time to helping their communities
The world around us changes in unbelievable pace. No matter, how we use our time, we miss doing something. In this way, many claims nowadays, we do not assign enough time to care and help others, while others disagree. From my perspective, although everybody has a unanimous consensus about the value of caring about each other’s, we do not try enough. In the following paragraphs, I express two conspicuous reasons to elaborate on my standpoint.
First and foremost, we live in the society which bombarding hearing about the importance of success. No media and no teachers talk about the value of being kind and caring about the other people. In this community, not surprisingly, people prefer to consume their time to get more money and better position. In the better words, they put their efforts to reach the targets that the media perpetuates. Take me an example, When I was going to high school, all of my teachers and my families push me toward to read more to be graduate with maximum GPA. Scarcely did I remember that I heard about the beneficial aspects of caring about the community and it can affect me to improve my personality as well as helping the other folks. Now, I think to myself, if I had been my parents, I should have taught my child the importance of the way he treats others. This example embodies there is a clear relationship between environmental effects and how the people affects from it in order to whether care about their society or not.
In the second place, our government should show the beneficial aspects of helping our society. Governments can use other country models to encourage people to be more involved in their communities. There are many developed countries that the importance of caring for others are well established. Folks can understand it can affect their lives as well as their others if the government shows the excellent models. For instance, two years ago, I watched a movie about the Japanese people; the film was talking about the culture of their native folks. Although, the main purpose of the film was not about the caring about each other, I was fascinated when I get familiar with the value of society in the Japanese culture. All of them consider the other rights before themselves. My country might have changed to the developed country if we had learned these behaviors.
In the final analysis, people in our country do not assist each other, not only do we exaggerate the value of success, but also our government does not advertise the value of caring toward other people. If we want to be me in better wealth, we should learn from the good models and revise our characteristics about treating others.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, well, while, for instance, i think, talking about, as well as, in the second place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2223.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 462.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81168831169 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63618218583 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66360174826 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.495670995671 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 694.8 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.5948369173 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.652173913 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0869565217 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.04347826087 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.150256097977 0.236089414692 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0469410955243 0.076458572812 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0541309385416 0.0737576698707 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100731546269 0.150856017488 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0358847620042 0.0645574589148 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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