Is an amusement park better to construct in the city to attract tourists ?
In the present days, tourism industry has been an important business sector for a country which allows the nation to have a greater income along with the employment opportunities. In my opinion, it is better to construct a new indoor amusement park than museums or shopping malls to attract more tourists in the city for the following reasons.
To embark, an indoor amusement park in the city attracts the visitors to have entertainment and refreshment. Visitors can play their favorite games in the park, have some refreshment talk time with their friends and family. One interesting thing in the park is that people can get a lot of enjoyment and can make their tour a memorable and romantic too. For instance, recently, I had been to Kathmandu city - the capital of Nepal - during the summer vacation. There, I had visited to Valley Fun Park, where I enjoyed swimming, played roller coaster and many more games, that really provided me the coveted refreshment in the busy city. So, later I recommended all of my friends and colleagues to visit there. Hence, indoor amusement parks allows the people to have fun, make them refreshed and attracts more people.
Secondly, an amusement park helps to attract all age groups of people, especially for children. It is the first and ultimate choice of children to have fun at the amusement parks. For example, I loved to visit many and many amusement parks during my childhood. My parents use to tell me now that they had to expend half of my father's monthly salary for me to visit the parks and play the games. Still on the adulthood, I visit the parks with my friends and family. There is no any age restriction on the parks. There are provisions of games and entertainment for all of the age groups of people. So, the construction of the amusement park really can lead to attract more people of all ages.
Last but not least, the establishment of amusement park helps to increase the income of the city. It helps in generating employment opportunities for the citizens and finally help to uplift the economic status of people. Exemplifying that, there has been increment of hotels, restaurants and lodges due to the amusement park that has been recently opened in the city, Bharatpur. So, the expenses that visitors do during their stay at parks would be a great source of income to the city and it can make an impact on the national level.
Hence, it is very beneficial to construct an amusement park in the city to attract more tourists.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, hence, if, really, second, secondly, so, still, for example, for instance, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 8.0752688172 297% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2066.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 432.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78240740741 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55901411391 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66433185462 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.458333333333 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 646.2 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.3667911657 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.9090909091 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6363636364 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.95454545455 5.45110844103 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 11.8709677419 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.403694949491 0.236089414692 171% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.127844518848 0.076458572812 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.13777069967 0.0737576698707 187% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.282372100317 0.150856017488 187% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.109997766585 0.0645574589148 170% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.83 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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