because people are busy doing so many different things, they do very few things well
Nowadays, life is going to be more complex through which people tend to do a lot of different things at the same time for life satisfaction. I believe that people’s performances will decrease if they take a lot of things to do. This essay will discuss the relationship between quality and quantity.
As we already know, being well in any kinds of jobs depends on some important factors. First, making a plane at the beginning of any job is required, by which people have chance of managing their times. As a fact that time is limited, if people take too many different jobs, they will not able to handle them at the same time. In this way you should put a time limit for each of them. Since few people are able to make an appropriate plan for doing variety types of tasks at the same time, they fail to do best in their results. That is why I believe that by doing different jobs, the results is going to be weak.
On the other hand, concentration is another important factor for well-done jobs in which people should focus on their works by which they can be well at the procedure of doing their duties. When it comes to concentration as a one of the human abilities, those being successful have high concentration on one task. For instance, imagine a person who is going to take a difficult exam like TOEFL in the next month and he is working full-time in a company as an engineer. In addition, he will be graduated but his M.Sc. thesis is still unfinished. Definitely, in aforementioned cases, he will not be successful because he cannot concentrate in all subjects at the same time and his results in most of them might be decreased or failed.
For the reasons mentioned above, I totally agree with the topic and it seems to me that well-done jobs need time and concentration. As a result, you don’t have a chance of being well by doing a lot of job in different fields.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 254, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...hat time is limited, if people take too many different jobs, they will not able to handle them...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 513, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Sc
...ddition, he will be graduated but his M.Sc. thesis is still unfinished. Definitely...
^^
Line 4, column 198, Rule ID: A_LOT_OF_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun job seems to be countable; consider using: 'a lot of jobs'.
Suggestion: a lot of jobs
...;t have a chance of being well by doing a lot of job in different fields.
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, so, still, well, for instance, in addition, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1546.0 1977.66487455 78% => OK
No of words: 344.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.49418604651 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30665032142 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67943790873 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.511627906977 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 484.2 618.680645161 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.395759857 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.625 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.625 5.45110844103 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.236733226759 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0843654919451 0.076458572812 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0839337151207 0.0737576698707 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161842141212 0.150856017488 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0593216075377 0.0645574589148 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.76 10.9000537634 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.39 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 86.8835125448 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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