Because the world is changing so quickly people now are less happy or less satisfied with their lives than people in the past
In this modern world everybody wants something more and they are not satisfied on what they have. In order to live a better life, modern world gives lot of opportunities but people are in an imaginary world who wants to flourish there retired life not the current life. Some old people says that they led a happyand satisfied life when they are in youth and now the technology and infrastructure made the life easy but devastated the youth minds. I also agree that the young generations have lot of comfortable things which is not available in the past and only thing they not have is the peace of mind.
The young generations are having more competitive mind and they are always compare the things with what the others have. This comparisons is not healthy, and the new business world have a pivotal role in this. For example, I have a decent car to commute and always look for my neighbors car which is an expensive one. My neighbour is a business man having lot of money and he can afford this type of spots cars. The problem is I am not looking on my gift and always want to compare with others. This comparison can happen in different levels such as comparing with other children’s grade with our kids grade and so on. The real problem what happens is we get more jealous and frustrated and we make different plans to reach the imaginary level. This makes more uncomfortable and will lure the family life and the personal life. In the early years this type of comparison was not there so they can find more peace in their life. Therefore, comparison between themselves is common in now a days which affects people lives.
The new generations become more selfish and they don't want to share. The latest report from united nations says that the eight percent people carry eighty percent of the total wealth which means the other ninety two percent population are starving. The old days people are more happy because of their sharing mentality. For example, when I was a kid, we usually go to different places and we plug lot of mangos and we will give these to my other friends also. They do not have any issue because they don’t want to waste this. Now the situation changed every part get fenced and no one can trespass to any property. This is because of the urbanization people want to live themselves and leads to loneliness which leads to other mental problems. AS a result, the selfishness made people more unhappy than before.
In conclusion, it is obvious that modern world have lot of things for entertainment but they don't have that much inner satisfaction on the things they hold. People are looking for more things that makes them happy. If they change their behavior then they will get a satisfied mind than before.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 144, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'gives'' or 'gif's'?
Suggestion: gives'; gif's
...der to live a better life, modern world gives lot of opportunities but people are i...
^^^^^
Line 1, column 156, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...a better life, modern world gives lot of opportunities but people are in an imag...
^^
Line 1, column 171, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...modern world gives lot of opportunities but people are in an imaginary world who...
^^
Line 1, column 356, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nd satisfied life when they are in youth and now the technology and infrastructur...
^^
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... they not have is the peace of mind. The young generations are having more co...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 81, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'compared'.
Suggestion: compared
...re competitive mind and they are always compare the things with what the others have. T...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 127, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: These
...e the things with what the others have. This comparisons is not healthy, and the ne...
^^^^
Line 3, column 144, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[4]
Message: You should probably use: 'are'.
Suggestion: are
... what the others have. This comparisons is not healthy, and the new business worl...
^^
Line 3, column 159, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s have. This comparisons is not healthy, and the new business world have a pivota...
^^
Line 3, column 293, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...commute and always look for my neighbors car which is an expensive one. My neighb...
^^
Line 3, column 462, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e problem is I am not looking on my gift and always want to compare with others. ...
^^
Line 3, column 996, Rule ID: NOW_A_DAYS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'nowadays'?
Suggestion: nowadays
...parison between themselves is common in now a days which affects people lives. The...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 1000, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a day' or simply 'days'?
Suggestion: a day; days
...son between themselves is common in now a days which affects people lives. The...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...w a days which affects people lives. The new generations become more selfish ...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 55, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...enerations become more selfish and they dont want to share. The latest report from u...
^^^^
Line 5, column 211, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: ninety-two
... the total wealth which means the other ninety two percent population are starving. The ol...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 255, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ty two percent population are starving. The old days people are more happy because...
^^^
Line 5, column 267, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nt population are starving. The old days people are more happy because of their s...
^^
Line 5, column 350, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...aring mentality. For example, when I was a kid, we usually go to different places...
^^
Line 5, column 462, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
... we will give these to my other friends also. They do not have any issue because the...
^^^^
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ade people more unhappy than before. In conclusion, it is obvious that modern...
^^^
Line 7, column 97, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ot of things for entertainment but they dont have that much inner satisfaction on th...
^^^^
Line 7, column 220, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... for more things that makes them happy. If they change their behavior then they w...
^^
Line 7, column 249, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...hem happy. If they change their behavior then they will get a satisfied mind than...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, so, then, therefore, for example, in conclusion, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2267.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 487.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.65503080082 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69766713281 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45367075006 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.455852156057 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 713.7 618.680645161 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.4598189793 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.68 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.48 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.6 5.45110844103 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 24.0 5.5376344086 433% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.188481575273 0.236089414692 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0606280902879 0.076458572812 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0562540021413 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125954703667 0.150856017488 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0323505300644 0.0645574589148 50% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.75 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.21 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.