Businesses should hire employees for their entire lives. Do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

I totally disagree with the view which states that businesses should hire employees for their entire life. The basis of my view are based on several reasons.

First of all, employrers can never make such a commitment with their employees. Beforehand, businesses have to virtually experience employees for quiet period of time before they can decide if they are good or not. It happens sometimes that employers could be fascinated by someone during a job interview and would think that he is a perfect candidate for the job. However, after experiencing him at work, they could realize that they were mistaken. Therefore, if employers are committed by a legitimate contract, then they can never get rid of their employees even if they have to.

Secondly, there would be less opportunities for new graduates to work.If employees are to stay in the same job for their whole life, then they would definitely limit any opportunity for new graduates to be employed or to launch any professional experience. If this would ever be the situation, then new generations would also be discouraged to continue their education or get credential degrees from best universities, because they would know that it would be almost impossible for them to get hired anywhere, no matter what degrees they are achieving.

Finally, Employees would also become more delinquent, as they would be certain that they would never loose their job. This attitude by itself could fail so many businesses, for the fact that the currently employed people would not be interested anymore to compete with each other or to show their talents. Therefore, their productivity would ratchet down, leading businesses to close or to claim their bankruptcy.

In conclusion, It is a real commitment for businesses to hire employees for their entire life. Moreover, there would be less professional opportunities for new graduates. In addition to this, employers would simply become more delinquents, and thus businesses would be affected so badly.

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Average: 7 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 153, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...irtually experience employees for quiet period of time before they can decide if they are good...
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Line 3, column 219, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[9]
Message: The adverb 'sometimes' is usually put before the verb 'happens'.
Suggestion: sometimes happens
... can decide if they are good or not. It happens sometimes that employers could be fascinated by s...
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Line 5, column 26, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun opportunities is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...ey have to. Secondly, there would be less opportunities for new graduates to work...
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Line 5, column 71, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: If
...opportunities for new graduates to work.If employees are to stay in the same job f...
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Line 5, column 396, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'from the best'.
Suggestion: from the best
...eir education or get credential degrees from best universities, because they would know t...
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Line 7, column 102, Rule ID: LOOSE_LOSE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'lose' (= miss, waste, suffer the loss etc.)?
Suggestion: lose
... would be certain that they would never loose their job. This attitude by itself coul...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, thus, in addition, in conclusion, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 9.8082437276 224% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 52.1666666667 63% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1688.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 324.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.20987654321 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24264068712 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85863124513 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.537037037037 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 516.6 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.1024491773 48.9658058833 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.533333333 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.66666666667 5.45110844103 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.136724582885 0.236089414692 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0685243542519 0.076458572812 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0811978503979 0.0737576698707 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111631329679 0.150856017488 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0626822722678 0.0645574589148 97% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200

Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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