caring for a pet is the best way for a child to learn responsibility
Some people think that having children look after pets is the best method to teach them responsibility. However, in my opinion, taking care of pets is not the most effective way for children to develop a responsible attitude. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explorer in the following essay.
To begin with, taking care of a pet is too difficult for young children. They do not know how to care for animals properly because they lack the necessary experience and knowledge. Therefore, having a pet can be a stressful and confusing experience for children, so they learn nothing from raising pets. For example, when I was in elementary school, my father bought me a dog. He insisted that I had to take care of it on my own. The problem was that I was not sure about the right way to do this. My dog seemed to like chocolate, so I kept feeding it to him. Unfortunately, I did not know that chocolate was harmful to dogs, and my dog died eventually. This was a very traumatic experience for me, not an opportunity to learn responsibility.
Furthermore, it is the parents who end up doing the majority of the work of caring for pets in the home. This is because whenever children take care of pets, most of the tasks involved require an adult's supervision or aid. Take the example of a family that has dogs. The children might be able to bathe the dogs, but an adult should be present at all times. This is because there are many things to be cautious about to keep the bath safe for dogs, like preventing water from getting in their ears. Likewise, the same goes for many other situations, such as when dogs fall ill and when children feed them. In reality, it is not the children who will learn responsibility by having a pet, but their parents. Therefore, it could be said that the children spend time playing with their pets at the expense of their parents' sacrifice.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that teaching children about responsibility by having them raise a pet is not the best way. This is because young children find it too challenging to care for a pet and because have to leave most of the duties to their parents
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 198, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'adults'' or 'adult's'?
Suggestion: adults'; adult's
..., most of the tasks involved require an adults supervision or aid. Take the example of...
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Line 7, column 183, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'caring'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'challenge' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: caring
... young children find it too challenging to care for a pet and because have to leave mos...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, if, likewise, look, so, therefore, for example, i feel, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1763.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 389.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.53213367609 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6623381867 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.503856041131 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 549.0 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.4887314261 48.9658058833 54% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 80.1363636364 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6818181818 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.13636363636 5.45110844103 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.36849481288 0.236089414692 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115057324624 0.076458572812 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.089294309089 0.0737576698707 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.267413953977 0.150856017488 177% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0586157487675 0.0645574589148 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.7 11.7677419355 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.7 10.9000537634 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.92 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 86.8835125448 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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