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Celebrities (such as actors, musicians and athletes, etc.) sometimes express their political views in public. Some people appreciate knowing the political views of celebrities, others think it is not appropriate or useful to know the political views of celebrities. Which opinion do you agree with?

Some well-known persons in today's advanced and complex world share their political perspectives with the general public, and the roles that celebrities' viewpoints play in a society are quite important. The following are some of the reasons why I believe it is unhelpful for the general public to be aware of the political beliefs of celebrities:

To begin, celebrities are not trained professionals in any political field, which implies that their opinions are of little benefit to the general public. To be more specific, actors and sportsmen may have talents in their own fields, but their political knowledge is on par with that of average people; as a result, they are not a dependable source of instruction. For instance, one musician supported one of the candidates in the presidential election that took place five years ago. People listened to this artist because he was well-known among them, and as a result, the candidate he backed was elected president of the United States. After only a few short months, our nation was confronted with a multitude of difficulties as a direct result of the actions made by the wrong president. When people pointed the finger of blame in that musician's direction, he responded by claiming that he was unaware of the negative aspects of the person he was supporting. In addition to this, he admitted that he lacked experience in the sphere of politics. Because the general public was aware of the political positions held by celebrities, our country was forced to deal with a variety of obstacles.

Second, famous individuals should keep their opinions to themselves and not share them with the general public since, in their view, doing so will not serve society. In order to clarify, superstars do not communicate their point of view in an impartial manner, and as a result, they think of themselves in their opinions. My own experience has shown that a well-known actor voiced his opposition whenever a government chose to invest in the improvement of existing transportation infrastructure. As a result, a large number of individuals, particularly supporters, decided to follow him rather than advocate for this cause. After one year, the transportation systems got so damaged that the inhabitants were unable to utilize them. This caused the citizens to have a difficult time getting around, as many of them did not own their own private vehicles. However, celebrities often had sophisticated automobiles, so it was not a concern for them to lack access to transportation. People would not have been forced to suffer through the destruction of their transportation infrastructure if they had not followed the advice of well-known figures. People are aware that their day-to-day concerns are not supported by celebrities, and that they should ignore the opinions of celebrities when making political decisions.

In conclusion, despite the fact that there are various reasons to be made for both sides, I am strongly of the opinion that it is counterproductive for the general population to be aware of the political beliefs held by celebrities. Not only do famous people lack the necessary understanding in the field of politics, but they also express their opinions depending on how those opinions would benefit them personally.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, second, so, well, as for, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 79.0 52.1666666667 151% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2754.0 1977.66487455 139% => OK
No of words: 533.0 407.700716846 131% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1669793621 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80487177365 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05050550131 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 267.0 212.727598566 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.500938086304 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 874.8 618.680645161 141% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 47.3101204818 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.7 100.406767564 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.65 20.6045352989 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.4 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.21076830109 0.236089414692 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0609658409198 0.076458572812 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0602951305677 0.0737576698707 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134440669224 0.150856017488 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0478303990466 0.0645574589148 74% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 11.7677419355 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 58.1214874552 78% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.13 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 142.0 86.8835125448 163% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 10.002688172 200% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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