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Celebrities (such as actors, musicians and athletes, etc.) sometimes express their political views in public. Some people appreciate knowing the political views of celebrities, others think it is not appropriate or useful to know the political views of celebrities. Which opinion do you agree with?

In today's modern and sophisticated world, some popular people express their political views to the public, and celebrities' opinions play a vital role in society. I concur with the notion that knowing the political views of celebrities is detrimental for the following reasons.

First, celebrities are not professionals in political majors, which means their views are not useful to people. To be more specific, actors or athletes have abilities in their field, but their political information is as same as ordinary people; thus, they are not reliable instructors. For example, in the presidential election five years ago, one musician supported one candidate. Because this musician was popular among people, they follow his view, and the supported candidate became president. After a few months, our country faced a host of challenges according to the wrong president's decisions. When people blamed that musician, he said that he did not comprehend the negative points of the man he was supporting. Moreover, he confessed that he was not adept in the political realm. It is because people knew the political views of celebrities that our nation was faced with many challenges.

Secondly, celebrities should not inform people about their ideas because they do not consider the public benefits in their opinion. To elucidate, celebrities do not express their view objectively, so they conceive themselves in their opinions. According to my own experience, when a government voted for improving transportation systems, one famous actor showed his disagreements. Therefore, many people, especially fans, chose to follow him, not advocate this project. After one year, the transportation systems became ruined, so much so that citizens could not use them, and they experienced a hard time as many of them did not have private cars. However, celebrities had modern cars, so lack of transportation was not important for them. Had it not been for the public to follow the opinion of the famous, people would not have suffered a ruined traffic system. Accordingly, people grasp that their daily issues are not supported by celebrities, and they should ignore them in political decisions.

To conclude, while there are several arguments on each side, I profoundly believe that it is not helpful for the public to be aware of celebrities' political notions. Not only do celebrities not have suitable knowledge in the realm of politics, but they also express their ideas based on their benefits.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, first, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, while, for example

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2098.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 395.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.31139240506 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45809453852 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.910394986 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.526582278481 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 657.0 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.7410420827 48.9658058833 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 104.9 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.75 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.55 5.45110844103 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.383991395694 0.236089414692 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.125103792587 0.076458572812 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.111662081525 0.0737576698707 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.277118062651 0.150856017488 184% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.110075232403 0.0645574589148 171% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 58.1214874552 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 10.9000537634 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.86 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 86.8835125448 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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