Celebrities such as actors musicians and athletes etc sometimes express their political views in public Some people appreciate knowing the political views of celebrities others think it is not appropriate or useful to know the political views of celebriti | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Celebrities (such as actors, musicians and athletes, etc.) sometimes express their political views in public. Some people appreciate knowing the political views of celebrities, others think it is not appropriate or useful to know the political views of celebrities. Which opinion do you agree with?

In today's modern and sophisticated world, some popular people express their political views to the public and celebrities' opinions play a vital role in a society. I concur with the notion that knowing political views of celebrities is detrimental, and I will analyze my reasons throughout this essay.

First, celebrities are not professional in political major, which means their view are not useful for people. To be more specific, actors or athletes have abilities in their own field, so their political information is as same as ordinary people; thus, they are not a reliable instructor. For example, in the president election five years ago, one musician support one candidate. Because this musician was popular between people, they follow his view, and the supported candidate became a president. After few months, our country faced a host of challenges according to the wrong president's decisions. When people blamed that musician, he said that he did not comprehend the negative points of the man whom he was supporting. Moreover, he confessed that he was not adept in political major. It is because people knew the political views of celebrities that our nation were faced with many challenges.

Secondly, celebrities should not inform people about their ideas because they do not consider the public benefits in their opinion. To elucidate, celebrities do not express their view objectively, so they conceive themselves in their opinions. According to my own experience, when a government voted for improving transportation systems, one famous actor showed his disagreements. Therefore, many people encouraged to pursue him, and they did not vote to this project positively. After one year, transportation system became ruined, so much so that citizens could not use them, and they experienced a hard time as many of them did not have a private car. However, celebrities had modern cars, so lack of transportation was not important for them. Had it not been for the public to follow the opinion of the famous, people would not have suffered a ruined traffic system. Accordingly, people grasp that their daily issues are not supported by celebrities, and they should ignore them in political decisions.

To conclude, while there are several arguments on each side, I profoundly believe that it is not helpful for the public to be aware of celebrities' political notions. Not only do celebrities not have suitable knowledge in realm of politics, but they also express their ideas based on their own benefits.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 416, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'pursuing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'encourage' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: pursuing
...ents. Therefore, many people encouraged to pursue him, and they did not vote to this proj...
^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, first, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, while, for example

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2121.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 405.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.23703703704 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48604634366 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89972222206 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.525925925926 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 669.6 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.0317068048 48.9658058833 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 106.05 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.25 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.55 5.45110844103 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.379103598118 0.236089414692 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.121960412154 0.076458572812 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.104321423979 0.0737576698707 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.267946408051 0.150856017488 178% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.09750597762 0.0645574589148 151% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 11.7677419355 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.96 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 10.002688172 125% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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