A city wants to help teachers of its high school students (age14-18) improve their teaching. It is
considering two plans：
1)Choose a small group of excellent teachers; these teachers will attend a class led by an expert
for additional training in how to teach effectively, and they will then come back to their schools
and provide that training for other teachers in school.
2)Provide additional training in teaching effectively for high school teachers, using online material
that each teacher will study individually
In the present day and life, the quality of education becomes much more important than before. Teachers in schools are trying to improve themselves to help their students to get good grades and to have good development. Moreover, there are two choices provided by the city for teachers to improve their ability-a small group of teachers led by an expert for additional training or teachers can use online material to study individually. In my opinion, I prefer teachers can study individually by using online material.
First of all, by using online material means that teachers can study it whenever they want. To be specific, they spend most of their time in school every day; they may don’t have much their own time to do their things if they need to go for additional training. For instance, my mom is a literature teacher in high school right now. Last month, she joined an additional training to improve herself in literature areas. I knew she can get a lot of benefits through it; however, she will come back home very late every night, we don’t have much time to share our concerns, and even we can’t have dinner together.
Furthermore, online material means that every teacher can study it and learn how to teach effectively. If only a small group of the teacher can get additional training, there will be a limit number of students who can take the classes and get benefits. Moreover, the purpose of the additional class will be meaningless. For instance, there are 300 students in my school, and every teacher in my school can go to a website to take the class which means every student will get the same quality of education. There won’t be any problems with the number of good teachers and students since every teacher is very professional.
All in all, if there is a chance for teachers to improve themselves to teach effectively in class, why not let every teacher get that chance? It will be equal to those teachers; meanwhile, they can share their opinions or ideas with others. Moreover, there won’t be any issues with only a small number of excellent teachers with a huge group of students’ situations happen.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 13, column 293, Rule ID: SMALL_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, use 'a few', or use 'some'
Suggestion: a few; some
...here won't be any issues with only a small number of excellent teachers with a huge group of...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, while, for instance, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1807.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 370.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88378378378 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38581623665 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67062586537 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.462162162162 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 560.7 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.1210597682 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.294117647 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7647058824 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.64705882353 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.30778284061 0.236089414692 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111496844267 0.076458572812 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.066350086604 0.0737576698707 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.206590376833 0.150856017488 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0517379819148 0.0645574589148 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.32 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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