Students in a university club want to help others, but they can only choose one project a year,
which one of the following is the best?
1)help those students in a nearby primary school with reading and mathematics
2)help people who cannot afford to build or rent a home to build a house
3) visit and assist elderly people with daily tasks
In the present day and life, students are encouraged to volunteer to work or help others. There are a lot of young children, elder people, or poor people need to be helped. Different people have different opinions , some of them may think the best choice for a club’s students to volunteer if they can only choose one project a year is to visit and help elderly people with daily tasks ; however, in my opinion, help those students in a nearby primary school with reading and mathematics is the best choice.
First of all, the primary school that they help has a close distance to them, thus, they can save a lot of time on the road and can have more time on helping primary school students. For instance, my sister is one of the members of her university’s student council; last week, they had a meeting about where they should go. Finally, they decided to go to a nearby school to help young children. The reason why they made that decision is that the can just take the bus by 15 minutes to go there instead of a long time-consuming. Also, they will go to that school once a week, so if they just take a public bus, it will help them save a lot of finance, thus, they can spend more money on buying books for young children instead of spending it on transportation.
Furthermore, teach children can help students to develop good personality-kind, patience, and careful.etc. Also, it will be an easy task for the student to volunteer because they knowledge that they teach is very simple and basic. For instance, last semester, I joined a volunteer activity in my school about teaching children mathematics twice a month. The knowledge that I taught is just an easy calculation of the numbers. Moreover, some children are not good at calculating, so I just teach them as many times as I can, until they know how to solve. One day, my mom just told me that she thinks that I change a lot; I became much patience and responsible instead of impatience. And she felt really happy with me.
Finally, help a nearby primary school with reading and mathematics has a lot of benefits no matter on students or little kids that they aid. I think society should encourage more and more university students to engage in it or offer these kinds of opportunities for students to work on it.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, really, so, thus, for instance, i think, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1885.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 410.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.59756097561 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49982852243 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69489079088 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.478048780488 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 577.8 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.7495898173 48.9658058833 138% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.882352941 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1176470588 20.6045352989 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.70588235294 5.45110844103 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.386813974578 0.236089414692 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.123764093188 0.076458572812 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.114606458788 0.0737576698707 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.264840266307 0.150856017488 176% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.115319291052 0.0645574589148 179% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.7 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.1 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 86.8835125448 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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