Which is better for children's education: 9-month study and 3-month break or 11-month study
and 1-month break?
In the present day and life, parents pay much more attention to children’s education; even some of them willing to give up their jobs and shift their energies to educate their kids. Moreover, someone may wonder that whether a 9-month study and a 3-month break are better for children’s education or an 11-month study and a 1-month break are better for children’s education. In my perspective, I prefer a short period of study and a long time of the break.
First of all, children can use the break time to develop their hobbies or go to different places that they willing to. To be specific, if students need to go to the school for 11 month, thus, there will be no time for them to do things that they want. Moreover, hobbies or go travel can have a lot of benefits to the development of children. For instance, every year, there will be three long-time breaks in my school. Last summer vacation, I went to XIAN, a city in China, with my family. Through the traveling, I contacted with the culture and history of that city, and I accumulated a lot of knowledge, meanwhile, I got fun and relax. When I came back to school, I made a presentation to my classmates about what I saw and knew, and I got extra credit from my teacher.
Secondly, too much time on the study will give children huge stress, and their mental or body will become unhealthy. For instance, my little brother is in grade 6 right now. Every day, he has a lot of homework need to do; even during the weekend, he needs to go to the tutorial classes. There is just a limit time for him to watch TV or do things that he wants to. What’s more, I have a kind of feeling that my little brother is exhausted by those school works and he always tells me that there is no hope in his life. I have to admit that as a student, my brother’s job is to study; however, spend too much time on the study will cause the opposite effect.
In the end, I think it will be much better for children to have a 9-month study and a 3-month break. They are the hope of our society, and they should get enough time to relax or do things that they willing to. Moreover, we should not put children in a high-stress situation, it’s adults’ responsibility to keep children’s naive instead of forcing them to spend too much time on studying.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, thus, while, even so, for instance, i think, kind of, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1900.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 427.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.44964871194 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54576487731 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70056017255 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.494145199063 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 577.8 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.4033600949 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.0 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4736842105 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.47368421053 5.45110844103 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.295589934983 0.236089414692 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0993170756607 0.076458572812 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.18125931307 0.0737576698707 246% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.223865111738 0.150856017488 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.1670241382 0.0645574589148 259% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.83 10.9000537634 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.17 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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