The community you live in is planning on setting up new facilities, which of the following do you think would benefit the community most and why? 1. a shopping mall 2. an art centre 3. a hotel
The condition and development of a community people live in is crucial for the living standard and moods. Since the room become gradually valuable, the usage of it should be considered thoroughly. In order to acquire the largest benefit, if there is an amount of money for the construction of my neighbourhood, I think a shopping mall should be built.
First of all, more people can enjoy a shopping mall than an art canter or a hotel. There is no doubt that everyone can go to the shopping mall even they do not want to buy anything. However, only tourists and businessmen who come from other places have needs for a hotel. It actually cannot benefit the residents living in the community at all. As for an art centre, those who love art and are willing to go to an art centre are the minority. In that case, few people will enjoy the benefits of building an art centre. Thus, a shopping mall should be built for the majority’s interests.
Secondly, more job opportunities will be created with a shopping mall than with an art centre or a hotel. As we all know, a shopping mall is dispensable for various and different stores, restaurants and even a cinema, which needs numerous workers to serve customers. The Wangda Squad in my neighbourhood is a classic example. Soon after this new huge shopping mall was opened, the unemployment in the whole city decreased 5 percent! Consequently, the crime rate in my community also went down. The influence brought by a shopping mall was unbelievable. Therefore, the impact comes with a shopping mall is the greatest.
In addition, it can improve the economic development of the community to a wider degree. If the shopping mall runs well, it will become a centre of one city. More and more private companies will definitely be interested in investing money in the community. Other facilities such as art centres, hotels and skyscrapers will come after. In this way, the all-around living quality of residents living there will be improved tremendously.
In conclusion, the choice of constructing a shopping mall is wise and reasonable according to above-mentioned reasons. I truly believe that the community will develop better in this way.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, consequently, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, well, as for, i think, in addition, in conclusion, no doubt, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 43.0788530466 42% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1830.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 373.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90616621984 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39467950092 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93790480362 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.514745308311 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 573.3 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 11.0 3.08781362007 356% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.105611206 48.9658058833 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.5652173913 100.406767564 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.2173913043 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.4347826087 5.45110844103 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.286089195902 0.236089414692 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0847079591883 0.076458572812 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0481701959773 0.0737576698707 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160630538675 0.150856017488 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0530579361484 0.0645574589148 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.9 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.86 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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