Competition between friends always has a negative effect on their friendship.
We are living in a sophisticated age friends have a profound impact on individual's life. People are always trying to make their lives more comfortable, delightful, and successful. Some people believe that competition among friends bring them positive consequences, while others are convinced that competition has negative effect on their friendship. After carefully pondering it from several aspects, I do strongly agree with the latter idea. There are some reasons, the most outstanding of which will be discussed in the ensuing paragraphs.
To begin with, it is undoubted that, competition give rise conflict among friends and make them detached each other. As a matter of fact, since mutual characteristics make a friendship strengthen, there is no logical reasons to have close relationship. To illustrate this fact, one needs only refer to the numerous students who lose their friendship duty to competition for acquiring high mark in the class. Seldom do people sustain their friendship if they cannot help each other. Because, competition intrinsically keep friends away each other. Although competition are able to bring for people better consequences, what results from accomplishing toward each other are to spend much less their time together. The noteworthy intelligible results, which conducted in our country, show that approximately 90% of friends competing each other in a company miss their job.
The second reason why I agree with it is that, obviously, every great relationship is based on assisting and understanding each other. In fact, if people do not help their friends, they will not be successful in their lives. The Modern world offers abundant examples of friends catching mental diseases due to disputing is derived from competition. Take a personal experience as an example, there was a time that my friend and I started to get scholarship for master degree in our universities due to that I studied hard and did not have adequate time for sleeping in that time resulting hard mental disease to get award. Had I not competed with my friends, I would not have caught diseases. Hence, were I be a determiner in our country, I would have forced all organizations to not create any competition among people. Because its disadvantages clearly outweigh its advantages.
To make a long story short, no one can deny the enormous negative effect of competing on people's friendship. Not only does it make their relationship weaker, but also is it possible that they miss their health. For this reason, i highly recommend that people have more collaboration each other than competition.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 72, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
...d age friends have a profound impact on individuals life. People are always trying to make ...
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Line 2, column 482, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...endship if they cannot help each other. Because, competition intrinsically keep friends...
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Line 3, column 820, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ot create any competition among people. Because its disadvantages clearly outweigh its ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, second, so, then, while, in fact, as a matter of fact, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2193.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 418.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24641148325 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52162009685 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99177864354 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55023923445 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 673.2 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.294891102 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.6818181818 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.09090909091 5.45110844103 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.295354040714 0.236089414692 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0830814024623 0.076458572812 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0874110644174 0.0737576698707 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.190817762109 0.150856017488 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0789337398504 0.0645574589148 122% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.17 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.58 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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