Few may doubt the importance of higher education and its impact in other aspects of life, especially on career choosing. Every year, numerous students flood to universities to gain required and sought-after skills of the increasingly competitive job market. Some of them become technicians and some pursue their studies to the zenith of their major and become competent doctors or engineers. It is a matter of debate on which approach is better: graduating from university as soon as possible and join the career, or gain a higher degree and spend more time on studying to have more and better job opportunities? Personally, I recommend my friend the second method and I believe it is a more beneficial idea. I state my reasons on this idea in the following paragraphs.
First of all, I think in first glance it might seem that it is better to end our education as soon as possible and seek a career to earn money, since having no income may put one under the financial pressure to some extent. Relying on parents’ money is difficult. Having said that, if one study in a sophisticated major, the amount of money that one earns is more in the long term. Besides, in the today's competitive job market, employers look for highly skilled and knowledgeable work forces to solve hard problems. Having a mediocre degree, one does not an advantage over other applicants in a career position. I give an example to shed light on this idea: Consider a person who decides to study accounting in order to graduate soon and one who studies software engineering: The positions for a software engineer are much higher-paying than the one who has studied accounting, although it has taken longer to get one's degree.
Alongside the reason I mentioned above, in case of educating longer in university, undoubtedly, my friend has more employment opportunities that brings the advantage for him to encounter a more suitable job, and even if he or she does not like the job, because of the abundance of other positions and his/her knowledge and insights in that major, my friend can switch his/her position later. Yet if he/she chooses to finish his/her study sooner, he/she won't have this great opportunity to change his/her job on demand, since open positions are eminently competitive. For instance, I majored in software engineering which is a difficult field. When I graduated, a lot of companies needed software engineers. The first company that I worked was not very satisfying in my opinion, so after a few months I quitted my job and joined another company with higher salary and better condition.
To recapitulate the aforementioned reasons, I believe that it is better to study longer in the university to have more employment opportunities. First, after graduating, one has more opportunities which pay him/her a great salary and has more options to choose from. Also, if the job one is doing is not rewarding or beneficial, one can easily quit and seek a better job, because of the unique skills one has gained during the long studies in the university.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[6]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun may seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'little may'.
Suggestion: Little may
Few may doubt the importance of higher educatio...
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Line 3, column 921, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...ng, although it has taken longer to get ones degree. Alongside the reason I menti...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, if, look, may, second, so, for instance, i think, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2543.0 1977.66487455 129% => OK
No of words: 516.0 407.700716846 127% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92829457364 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76609204519 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89290327173 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 262.0 212.727598566 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507751937984 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 825.3 618.680645161 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 83.7682965089 48.9658058833 171% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.15 100.406767564 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.8 20.6045352989 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.95 5.45110844103 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.330383839643 0.236089414692 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0884036850983 0.076458572812 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0748686844027 0.0737576698707 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.213773030573 0.150856017488 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0379393367402 0.0645574589148 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 11.7677419355 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 126.0 86.8835125448 145% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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