Some children may be self-motivated in doing their school chores while some may need some external stimulus from their parents. There are many ways to encourage children to study and get better marks at school. While some parents may motivate their children by offering them money, I vigorously discourage this method because of its possible negative effects it might have on children. Below I am going to illustrate my reasons and ideas about this issue.
First, I think offering money for each good grade is a form of early gratification, and early gratification has a negative effect on children's efforts. He or she might think there should be always a financial reward from parents in the result of everything they do, and it destorys the motives for trying to accomplish something for its own good. When this amount of money is not provided by parents they become angry or frustrated and might refuse to study. In my opinion, many better aproaches can be used by parents that encourages childeren more; for example, throwing for an "honor party" and acclaiming the child's progress in front of other people once or twice in a year is a better idea.
Moreover, I believe that after a while, this method might lose its effect on children. Children do not look for money, but they also need attention and practical encouragement. I think they should enjoy the happiness of feeling accomplished. Offering them money, parents steal these valuable feelings that are much more beneficial for their children in future. When grow up, these children may not be so self-motivated to set goals for themeselves and try for them. They become lathargic and even selfish, in my opinion, becausse they expect an instant mundante reward for what they do.
As a conclusion, I do not support giving money to children for their performance at school, because in this way, they will not appreciate other good results of accomplishing something important and useful. They consider studying as a way to receive money, and nothing more. It may convey negative traits in them such as lack of motivation for their future goals. In the long run, I think it is better to utilize other methods in order to keep children motivated.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, may, moreover, so, while, for example, i think, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1853.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 373.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96782841823 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39467950092 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72521129248 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.541554959786 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 571.5 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.7454309808 48.9658058833 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.944444444 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7222222222 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.44444444444 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.377202115283 0.236089414692 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.120355339992 0.076458572812 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.055862797282 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.240973642317 0.150856017488 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0268949876006 0.0645574589148 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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