computer games
Nowadays the computer games are trending so that they involve most of children and adults as well. Personally, I think that these games treat children negatively. I feel this way for two reasons which I explore them in the following essay.
First of all, computer games prevent children from becoming social. With the times they spend on the playing games, they can not go out and communicate with their peers. So they do not learn this ability and this is caused to most serious problems in their future life. One of my classmate in the middle school was the compelling example of this. Can be said, he was addicted to these games and in all his leisure times he enjoyed playing instead of being with her family and his friends and socialize with them. As a result, he could not mingle with his classmates is school because he did not learn how to strat speaking and how to follow it. This example clearly illustrate my opinion about computer games.
Secondly. children's eyesight is affected by playing games. To be more specific, when they follow the game's characters with their eyes for a long time, eyes become tired. Since a game player sees the necessity to finish the steps one after another, and poor eyes have to accompany with their owners, they become weaker after a while. Back to the example that I mentioned in the previous paragraph about my classmate, he wore an eyeglass with the high eyenumber and his doctor concerned him if he continue playing games, his eyes will be weaker than now.
To sum it up, I strongly believe that children should be forbidden from playing computer games. This is because, it deprives children of being in the society, and it damages children's eyes as well.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 63, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the children') or simply say ''most children''.
Suggestion: most of the children; most children
...games are trending so that they involve most of children and adults as well. Personally, I think...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Childrens
...on about computer games. Secondly. childrens eyesight is affected by playing games. ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...d by playing games. To be more specific, when they follow the games characters wi...
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Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'continues'.
Suggestion: continues
...mber and his doctor concerned him if he continue playing games, his eyes will be weaker ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, second, secondly, so, well, while, i feel, i think, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 8.0752688172 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1420.0 1977.66487455 72% => OK
No of words: 299.0 407.700716846 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.7491638796 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1583189471 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.3534459035 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 212.727598566 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.545150501672 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 422.1 618.680645161 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.7271368832 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.75 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6875 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 5.45110844103 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.202328303886 0.236089414692 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0844709161466 0.076458572812 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.110659641205 0.0737576698707 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143758454447 0.150856017488 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0802216721213 0.0645574589148 124% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.27 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.8 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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