A/D: parents should determine the future of their children rather than allow children to make their own choices.
No one can deny that making decisions for the future is very crucial and required a lot of knowledge. In this context, parents can be very effective in determining the future of their child. However, the involvement of parents for making decisions for the future of their children by themselves has always been a controversial topic between families. Personally, were I forced to advise parents in this context, I would definitely say to them that let your children construct their future by themselves. I feel this way because it helps them to become independent in the future and can choose their future based on their interest because they should live it not their parents. To shed light on my viewpoint, I will elaborate on those reasons in the following paragraphs.
The first reason that supports my perspective is concerned with the fact that making decisions for the future's life of children makes them dependent on their parents. To put this in a more vivid picture, while making such decisions is hard and requires a high level of knowledge and a long-term viewpoint, it can help children to become independent in the future and be able to do their job by themselves. Although, their parents can be a good source of help for making those decisions. Consequently, by being freestanding in making decisions for the future by children themselves, they can be more successful in the future; however, they should consider the experiences of their parents, families, and friends. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. When I was in elementary school, my father always told me that you should make your decisions by yourself even I did not have very experiences. So I always try to consider the long-term effects of my decision and make them by myself which help me to improve my decision making skill. Even I chose my field in university, which is The University of Tehran, by myself while a lot of my friends went to the fields that their parents chose. Moreover, this skill made me independent which was very helpful for me when I went to university and lived in a dormitory. Had I not allowed to make my decision by myself, I would never have been able to become independent in the future.
Another conspicuous point that should be brought up in this context is the fact that they are children that are going to live in the future so they should make their future and its decisions by themselves and parents should not intervene in this affair. As a matter of fact, making decisions for the future such as a field in university, needs a high interest in that decision because if children do not like those situations, they will not be successful. Nevertheless, parents may know their children's personality and can give them a piece of advice in their decision, but children should make those decisions by themselves finally. Therefore, children know their fields of interest and personal characteristics better than their families and it better that determine their future by themselves. To be specified, comprehensive research in 2020 at The University of Tehran has shown that even though parents know their personal characteristics of their children, they often make wrong decisions for their future. This study has been applied for many students in university and most of them believes that their current decision is not compatible with their interest and therefore they are not happy and successful while most of their fields had been chosen by their parents. As a result, based on the aforementioned study, the more knowledge children have of their interest, the more accurate decision they can make for their future so it is better that parents allow them to determine their future by themselves.
To make a long story short, I am of the opinion that children should determine their future by themselves, This is my firm belief that is rooted in two main reasons: (1) by making such decisions children can become independent in the future and also, (2) those children are going to live in that determined future so it should be based on their interest and personal characteristics.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, finally, first, however, if, may, moreover, nevertheless, so, therefore, while, i feel, such as, as a matter of fact, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 15.1003584229 199% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 9.8082437276 234% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 11.0286738351 199% => OK
Pronoun: 126.0 43.0788530466 292% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 91.0 52.1666666667 174% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3426.0 1977.66487455 173% => OK
No of words: 697.0 407.700716846 171% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91535150646 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.13816675137 4.48103885553 115% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82053590833 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 249.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.357245337159 0.524837075471 68% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1062.9 618.680645161 172% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 71.0369133307 48.9658058833 145% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.75 100.406767564 142% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.0416666667 20.6045352989 141% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.41666666667 5.45110844103 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.5376344086 217% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.458355773919 0.236089414692 194% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.180326639607 0.076458572812 236% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.122654705602 0.0737576698707 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.370580400993 0.150856017488 246% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0910436560246 0.0645574589148 141% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 11.7677419355 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 58.1214874552 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.85 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.61 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 86.8835125448 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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