Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? If you do not make sure other people (especially influential people or your employers) know about your strengths and accomplishments, you will never get successful in life.
No one can deny that being successful in life is very tricky. Finding a job as one of the most important aspects of life requires a lot of considerations that people should think about them. To make it more clear, the most efficient way that people should communicate with other people and their bosses is a controversial topic between people. Personally, were I asked to choose the best way of being successful in life and job, I would definitely try to show my skills to my surrounding people or my supervisors. I feel this way because if people work in group projects, their individual’s performance will be ignored, and one task cannot challenge all of the people's skills, so they should present their whole skills in person. To shed light on my viewpoint, I will elaborate on these reasons in the following paragraphs.
The first reason that supports my perspective is concerned with the fact that individuals' skills cannot be seen in group projects. To put this in a more vivid picture, while the results of the group project maybe be not very satisfying, individuals' performances are very good. Therefore, people should try to show themselves by personal activities and bold their skills for others to prevent them from being ignored in the overall group result. In this way, the bosses can know people better. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. When I was in my first carrier, which was a senior backend developer, I used to talk with my supervisor in person. In one of our projects, the output of the whole group was not very good, but my supervisor's view did not change about me because he knew me in person. Had I not talked with my boss directly and showed him my special skills, I would have lost that job such as a few of my coworkers because of that bad project output.
Another conspicuous reason that should be brought up here is the fact that when someone asks a task from people, he only recognizes the skills related to that task. As a matter of fact, while a person may have a lot of skills, he does not use them in a specific project because they are not necessary. Although that task may take a lot of efforts, it cannot show all of the people's skills. Consequently, people should directly connect to their administer to present their different skills and show their special abilities whether or not in the specific project they use how many of their skills. To specify, comprehensive research has shown that there are a lot of graduated students that cannot present themselves very well, so they cannot find a proper job. This study analyzes the relation of these people with their bosses or their interviewer. Based on the results of this study, the more students present their different skills, the better the job students have in the future.
To make a long story short, I am of the opinion that people should try to show their skills to other people and their bosses. This is my firm belief that is rooted in two main reasons: (1) in group projects individuals' skills might be ignored, and (2) most of the people's skills are not seen by others because bosses only can see the skills related to the projects.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, if, may, so, therefore, well, while, i feel, such as, as a matter of fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 9.8082437276 224% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 77.0 43.0788530466 179% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 72.0 52.1666666667 138% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2606.0 1977.66487455 132% => OK
No of words: 558.0 407.700716846 137% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.67025089606 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.86024933743 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60587773787 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.430107526882 0.524837075471 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 783.0 618.680645161 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.1328894547 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.304347826 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2608695652 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.30434782609 5.45110844103 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.11096665662 0.236089414692 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0441250687999 0.076458572812 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0404359657734 0.0737576698707 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0866328769629 0.150856017488 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0483687364483 0.0645574589148 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.54 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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