Since the dawn of the civilization, people have been trying to give their children confidence which helps them to improve in their daily life. I subscribe to the idea that it is a good idea that parents give their school- age children money for each high grade. In what follows, two conspicuous reasons will vindicate my standpoint.
To begin whit, of course there are some who argue that parents should not give their children money since parents should oblige their school- age children to earn money by themselves. I, on the other hand, think this is a misleading idea. When parents give money to their young children as they get a high grades, they will help their children to boost their confidence; consequently, they can trust themselves and easily prepare for the next exam. In fact, giving to money children because of their high grades give them motivation to practice more for their next exam and enhance their confidence. For instance, when my brother was a little boy, he hardly were going to English class as he think the English exams were so tough for him to pass them. My father told to my brother that I give you ten dollars if you pass your first exam. He accepted and he passed its English exam, and also this money gave him a motivation to study more and easily pass other exams.
Furthermore, as parents give money to their children for each high grades, they make them independent; hence, they learn how to gain money and also how to spend. I mean, when parents give their children money, children learn that one of the best way for earning money is by studying hard and getting high grades; moreover, they learn how to spend their money and at last become more independent. I think my own experience is a compelling example for illuminating my idea. When I was going to university, my father gave money to me for getting high grades. I knew that by studying hard and being bookish, I can earn money. Earning money helped me to know how to spend it and don't squander my money.
In conclusion, I am of the opinion that it is an excellent idea that parents give their school-age children money for each high grade. This is because, giving money is kind of a motivation which help children to study more for getting high grades, and also earning money will help the children to learn how to earn money and how to spend it and not waste it.
Since the dawn of the civilization, people have been trying to give their children confidence which helps them to improve in their daily life. I subscribe to the idea that it is a good idea that parents give their school- age children money for each high grade. In what follows, two conspicuous reasons will vindicate my standpoint.
To begin whit, of course there are some who argue that parents should not give their children money since parents should oblige their school- age children to earn money by themselves. I, on the other hand, think this is a misleading idea. When parents give money to their young children as they get a high grades, they will help their children to boost their confidence; consequently, they can trust themselves and easily prepare for the next exam. In fact, giving to money children because of their high grades give them motivation to practice more for their next exam and enhance their confidence. For instance, when my brother was a little boy, he hardly were going to English class as he think the English exams were so tough for him to pass them. My father told to my brother that I give you ten dollars if you pass your first exam. He accepted and he passed its English exam, and also this money gave him a motivation to study more and easily pass other exams.
Furthermore, as parents give money to their children for each high grades, they make them independent; hence, they learn how to gain money and also how to spend. I mean, when parents give their children money, children learn that one of the best way for earning money is by studying hard and getting high grades; moreover, they learn how to spend their money and at last become more independent. I think my own experience is a compelling example for illuminating my idea. When I was going to university, my father gave money to me for getting high grades. I knew that by studying hard and being bookish, I can earn money. Earning money helped me to know how to spend it and don't squander my money.
In conclusion, I am of the opinion that it is an excellent idea that parents give their school-age children money for each high grade. This is because, giving money is kind of a motivation which help children to study more for getting high grades, and also earning money will help the children to learn how to earn money and how to spend it and not waste it.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 651, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[5]
Message: The adverb 'hardly' is usually put after the verb 'were'.
Suggestion: were hardly
...e, when my brother was a little boy, he hardly were going to English class as he think the ...
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Line 2, column 692, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'thinks'.
Suggestion: thinks
...ardly were going to English class as he think the English exams were so tough for him...
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Line 4, column 675, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...y helped me to know how to spend it and dont squander my money. In conclusion, I ...
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Line 6, column 169, Rule ID: KIND_OF_A[1]
Message: Don't include 'a' after a classification term. Use simply 'kind of'.
Suggestion: kind of
...grade. This is because, giving money is kind of a motivation which help children to study...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, furthermore, hence, if, moreover, so, for instance, i mean, i think, in conclusion, in fact, kind of, of course, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 71.0 43.0788530466 165% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1945.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 424.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.58726415094 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53775939005 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36848706954 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.422169811321 0.524837075471 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 582.3 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.9256793032 48.9658058833 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.055555556 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5555555556 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.72222222222 5.45110844103 160% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.54676015402 0.236089414692 232% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.212239106709 0.076458572812 278% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.198934902222 0.0737576698707 270% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.448979070343 0.150856017488 298% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.196036439982 0.0645574589148 304% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 58.1214874552 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.64 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.86 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 86.8835125448 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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