Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Since the dawn of the civilization, people were trying to prepare their children to work for the family since they want to teach them how to survive as a humanity. I strongly believe that one of the best ways that parents can aid their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job. In what follows, two conspicuous reason will vindicate my stand point.
To begin with, when children are going to involve in activities such as taking a part-time job, they learn team working; consequently, they learn how to communicate with each other which will help them a lot in future. I mean, a lot of obstacles which children will face with them in future are not surmountable unless they help each other to overcome that obstacle. I think my own experience is a compelling example for illuminating my statement. When I was a little boy, my mother forced me to take a part-time job in library. Not only me, but also lot of other teenage children who had the same age as me were there: as a result of working on that library, I was able to be a social person and learn how to be as member in team. When I grew up, I had a problem in mathematic in high school, but because I know how to communicate with others I asked other to help me cope with that problem ,in fact asking them to help me was one of the advantages of talking part- time hob.
Furthermore, Of course there are some who argue that taking part-job making a lot of stress for children. I think this is a miss-guiding idea. When children forced to involve in activities, they become independent. I mean, as they know that they should do their duties, they learn to be more independent; thus, their independence provide a lot of opportunities for them in future. When you learn how to be independent and stand on your own feet, you can cope with many problems and issues which you face in future. For example, I was working in library when I was teenager. When I grew up I can deal with a lot of problem, One of my problems was lacking of money, but since I know how t stand on my own feet, I took a occupation; as a result of taking that job I deal with that issue.
In conclusion, I am of the opinion that it is useful for teenager to take a part-time job. It is due to the fact, it is learning them team working and make them more independent.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, furthermore, if, so, thus, for example, i mean, i think, in conclusion, in fact, of course, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 22.0 11.0286738351 199% => OK
Pronoun: 68.0 43.0788530466 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1911.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 441.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.33333333333 4.8611393121 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58257569496 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61032699183 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.43537414966 0.524837075471 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 605.7 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.4292260254 48.9658058833 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.166666667 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5 20.6045352989 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.44444444444 5.45110844103 155% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 5.5376344086 271% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.335486101743 0.236089414692 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.114867017315 0.076458572812 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.116569381541 0.0737576698707 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.235097621484 0.150856017488 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.077332142326 0.0645574589148 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.13 10.9000537634 75% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.19 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.