Describe a custom from your country that you would like people from other countries to adopt Explain your choice using specific reasons and examples

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Describe a custom from your country that you would like people from other countries to adopt. Explain your choice, using specific reasons and examples.

Many countries accept custom from other countries and there are many advantage of to take tradition and habit from different countries. If I have decide the choice custom in my country which is adopt the other country is joint family because improvement in people life with parents and other elder family members.
Joint family has main advantage is support to each family member to other. For instance, husband and wife go to work that time other family member caring of their children, children is safe with family member. However, in other countries people are waste of money by giving money to baby sitter lady and baby care center because they are live in nuclear family. While some one suffering from illness that time other family member help and take care of them.
In other country people live nuclear family and separated from their parents that time parents are face lots of problem and no one caring them when they elder. In my country custom is teach to other countries people to responsibility on their parents, how to treated and stay with elder family members and they gets lots of good virtue in their life. Furthermore, joint family is connected to each person of the family and made strong bond which is sufficient to face any difficulty. In many festival celebrate with family is more joyful then nuclear family.
In join family, elder people have more experience and knowledge to share their tradition and culture to their offspring. Children are raise with good enculturation. In addition, save money with join family. For example, when we are live in individual family like all sibling and their children are live in separate to increase the cost of home, electricity bill, separate meals, but when we live together with family our cost is divide to each member of family.
I share my country custom to other countries people to improvement in their life and also it is essential for any country people to understand their responsibility to on their family and make strong bonding with each other to help them in difficult situation.

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Average: 2.3 (4 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 65, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun advantage seems to be countable; consider using: 'many advantages'.
Suggestion: many advantages
...stom from other countries and there are many advantage of to take tradition and habit from dif...
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Line 1, column 147, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'decided'.
Suggestion: decided
...bit from different countries. If I have decide the choice custom in my country which i...
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Line 1, column 195, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'adopted'.
Suggestion: adopted
...he choice custom in my country which is adopt the other country is joint family becau...
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Line 3, column 105, Rule ID: LOTS_OF_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun problem seems to be countable; consider using: 'lots of problems'.
Suggestion: lots of problems
...heir parents that time parents are face lots of problem and no one caring them when they elder....
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Line 3, column 185, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'taught'.
Suggestion: taught
...hen they elder. In my country custom is teach to other countries people to responsibi...
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Line 3, column 312, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'get'
Suggestion: get
...stay with elder family members and they gets lots of good virtue in their life. Furt...
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Line 3, column 488, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun festival seems to be countable; consider using: 'many festivals'.
Suggestion: many festivals
...s sufficient to face any difficulty. In many festival celebrate with family is more joyful th...
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Line 3, column 539, Rule ID: LESS_MORE_THEN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'than'?
Suggestion: than
...al celebrate with family is more joyful then nuclear family. In join family, elder...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'furthermore', 'however', 'if', 'so', 'then', 'while', 'for example', 'for instance', 'in addition']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.32 0.229887763892 139% => OK
Verbs: 0.122666666667 0.158761421928 77% => OK
Adjectives: 0.12 0.0866891130778 138% => OK
Adverbs: 0.016 0.046263068375 35% => Some adverbs wanted.
Pronouns: 0.0666666666667 0.0685040099705 97% => OK
Prepositions: 0.128 0.118717715034 108% => OK
Participles: 0.016 0.0351676179071 45% => Some participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 2.41662305594 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0506666666667 0.0309702414327 164% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0373333333333 0.0887237588012 42% => Some determiners wanted.
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0 0.0209618222197 0% => Some modal verbs wanted.
WH_determiners: 0.016 0.0139019557991 115% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2060.0 2387.08602151 86% => OK
No of words: 349.0 408.028673835 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.90257879656 5.86048508987 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32221490584 4.48200974243 96% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.352435530086 0.338922669872 104% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.21776504298 0.251872472559 86% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.134670487106 0.174417080927 77% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.100286532951 0.112833075102 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41662305594 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 212.727598566 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.429799426934 0.524397521467 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 43.4591438164 59.2087087015 73% => OK
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6684587814 73% => OK
Sentence length: 23.2666666667 20.5533526081 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.4049687524 48.84282405 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.333333333 120.699889404 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2666666667 20.5533526081 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.733333333333 0.644075263715 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.54480286738 144% => OK
Readability: 45.0431709647 45.7405998639 98% => OK
Elegance: 2.25974025974 1.45489161554 155% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.220390073846 0.300154397459 73% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.143401640024 0.103427244359 139% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0931824667793 0.0752933317313 124% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.597780868932 0.497263757937 120% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.17412210947 0.151897553556 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104035894067 0.114077575197 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0764129665954 0.0781384742642 98% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.427736277616 0.336927656856 127% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0681142446389 0.067059652881 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.177659709721 0.210909579961 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.07202406143 0.0618886996521 116% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8870967742 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.86379928315 26% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.91756272401 0% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 13.0 8.42114695341 154% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 2.4623655914 41% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 2.75985663082 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 14.0 13.6433691756 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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