do grades encourage students to learn

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do grades encourage students to learn?

Oversee education in the world, we would be amazed for the various exams which should students participate in every terms. Evidently, marking is considered as the most common way to judge students’ performance. The education system is difficult to run without marking. In some extent, work for high score is the key to motivated students focus on text books. We cannot deny that score could encourage students to study, however, we cannot exaggerate its importance.

Without saying, marking could made students study for get the No1. No1 is a holy place for them. No one would like to be fall behind. So, as soon as the competition begin among students, study efficiency would improve. Those winners would study harder and harder to keep their place, for those who failed from competition would either study hard, in order to eliminate errors in the past and struggle for the better score. Students are given power because of this mind. Researches from Chinese Academy of Sciences had a survey in ten key middle schools in Shang Hai. They listed a serious of problems about what motivated them to study hard in the schools, and asked students to answer the paper. From 2000 participating students, more than half of students mentioned they desired to get good grades in National College Entrance Examination.

Score could also help students to find out their insufficient during studying. For every time the ending of a round of test and announce results, students would find disadvantages in some subjects. They would try their best to find the reason why they lose the marks. After reviewing, they would naturally pay attention to something ignored before, and acquire the objective attitude in their school work. Since then, they would focus on disadvantage appealing in the test. As a common principle says, eliminate from mistakes from the past could help to avoid made new mistakes. If it works, students could advance.

However, high scores and low abilities have already been some students undesirable place. Meanwhile, low mark also causes some of students lose confidence to study. school should avoid the production of these two extremely phenomenon. Study is a comprehensive process, instead of just include get score and pass the exam. For instance, school could implement projects which main purpose is open up thinking and cultivate interests, offering students part time jobs to accumulate experience and organize plentiful activities, all of these study chance favored by students could encourage them to get better grades, and help them embrace challenges when join the labor force in the future.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 31, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'make'
Suggestion: make
...tance. Without saying, marking could made students study for get the No1. No1 is ...
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Line 7, column 123, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'some of', you should use 'the' ('some of the students') or simply say ''some students''.
Suggestion: some of the students; some students
... place. Meanwhile, low mark also causes some of students lose confidence to study. school should...
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Line 7, column 166, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: School
...e of students lose confidence to study. school should avoid the production of these tw...
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Line 7, column 451, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
... cultivate interests, offering students part time jobs to accumulate experience and organ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, so, then, while, for instance

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 9.8082437276 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 43.0788530466 58% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2201.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 425.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17882352941 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54043259262 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59427530533 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.576470588235 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 675.0 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 65.0415433924 48.9658058833 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.6538461538 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.3461538462 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.84615384615 5.45110844103 34% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.163622814487 0.236089414692 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0469858333342 0.076458572812 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0467312466111 0.0737576698707 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106135615769 0.150856017488 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0313154125636 0.0645574589148 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.59 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 86.8835125448 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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