Do you agree with the following statement?. In the past, the young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them.today, young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.
By and large, it has been established beyond doubt that one of the most invaluable assets of each society is the youth and it has been proven that teaching and education of life skills to the young people is of a prominent role in their future as well as the prosperous future of a society. A controversial question which is raised here is whether dependently decision- making by the youth can facilitate their progression or not? And what is the main role of parents in such processes? Some people may believe that in the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them. However, others may have the opposite viewpoint and believe that today, young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives. From my perspective, I firmly agree with the latter one and in the following paragraph I will delve in to the most outstanding reasons and examples.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned here is that with the elevation of the people's level of life and extension of education, going to school is an obligatory regulation, and consequently they learn how to communicate with each other even adults and encounter the different type of circumstances. In long run, when they are growing, then enter the colleges or universities even markets, they gradually learn the skills of decision making even better than their parents. The educating systems and teachers improve their ability by giving them advantageous opportunities to deal with problems and creating innovative solutions.
Furthermore, another significant point is that populations in our societies are growing so fast and the resources and opportunities have been drastically restricted, then ,as young people to achieve their purposes, they may face a large spectrum of problems and difficulties and they have to be fast enough to make a wise decision and to be brave to take risks to access their desirable aims, dependence to parents will kill the time because most of the time they are concern about their children’s lives and are going to provide an environment without any serious tensions and difficulties. Being independent in every facet of life especially in decision making is a tremendous factor which is required to follow your ambitious dreams. Parents may teach and show their children the right primitive things, but young people must have the power of decision making for their arduous moments of their lives and accept the responsibility of their decision consequences. To illustrate, all through of my life, my parents made important decisions for my life, even how I wore my clothes or what I studied in university, etc. and when I went to the university in another city far from my home town, I faced with some difficulties and I have not known how to solve my problems, but I gradually learned to overcome on them and be independent. Then, had not I lived alone in another city without my parents, I would have not made wise decisions and gained my self-confidence at such a level in response to tough circumstances.
To wrap it up, all aforementioned reasons lead us to the conclusion that in terms of social progressions especially the risen level of teaching in schools and university together with a diverse range of difficulties the youth have faced to them, in today's world, young people are more independent in decision making for their lives.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, furthermore, however, if, may, so, then, well, as well as, by and large
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 31.0 13.8261648746 224% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 88.0 52.1666666667 169% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2831.0 1977.66487455 143% => OK
No of words: 572.0 407.700716846 140% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9493006993 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.89045207381 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89096937409 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 271.0 212.727598566 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.473776223776 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 891.9 618.680645161 144% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 35.0 20.1344086022 174% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 121.385861383 48.9658058833 248% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 176.9375 100.406767564 176% => OK
Words per sentence: 35.75 20.6045352989 174% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0625 5.45110844103 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.462325507115 0.236089414692 196% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.167456537635 0.076458572812 219% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.15293229584 0.0737576698707 207% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.293247516086 0.150856017488 194% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.129131683752 0.0645574589148 200% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.8 11.7677419355 168% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.95 58.1214874552 62% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.9 10.1575268817 166% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.66 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 86.8835125448 137% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.0 10.0537634409 159% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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