Do you agree with the following statement? People often buy products not because
they need them but because other people have them.
Today’s shopping is being more controversial in everybody’s life. They focused on each other’s lifestyle to find some ways to improve their own life especially on how other supply their necessities. I believe; however, people unconsciously copy other people’s behaviors and competing with each other have made them superficial.
Not only are people influenced by marketing, they are also influenced by other consumers whom they live around them. Sometimes they imitate others to fit in; sometimes they follow people they know because they are merely uncertain about the best choice. For instance, someone sees a pair of boots in her friend’s closet, and she thinks it may be essential for her during the freezing days, so she tries to buy one pair for a rainy day. Copying others is not limited to the influence of people you know. Merely noticing what other people consume can affect what they buy, often unconsciously. Another example, buying ice cream in the park after seeing others eat some first, plays an essential role in this process that causes us to feel a desire to buy one.
Another point is that competition in people is strong and has become an integral part of their life. Sometimes they put effort with an ostentatious display to splurge themselves in richness. In these visions of grandeur, they do not care about what they need. Thus, they want to purchase something to show-off to their peers that they are wealthy. Leasing an expensive car to show your colleague would be a perfect example of this type of behavior. Superficiality is another aspect of this type of behavior. For example, after the advent of LED televisions, people were faced with a proliferation of these instruments. Many people tried to buy them unreasonably, and replace their LCD displayers.
To summarize, people should be conversant with how to manage their buying habits as it keeps them away from being superficial and keeps them aware of how many commodities are their necessities. It is high time we stopped overlooking the fact that buying unnecessarily has had a drastic influence on our behavior and triggered a rivalry in people’s buying.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, look, may, so, thus, for example, for instance, you know
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1827.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 356.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13202247191 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34372677135 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93273897521 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.584269662921 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 561.6 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.3788156521 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.1578947368 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7368421053 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.31578947368 5.45110844103 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.29795627695 0.236089414692 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0945750649198 0.076458572812 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0845874157714 0.0737576698707 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.183099367821 0.150856017488 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0252011990296 0.0645574589148 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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