Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at young age.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
One of the comforts of living in the modern hectic life is having the opportunity to travel in order to take a break from your duties and unwind by visiting places which either bring back fond memories or help you discover something novel. Controversy exists over whether traveling in your own country is far more efficient than visiting a foreign country. I believe, however, traveling to foreign countries enriches your experience more and enables you to socialize with new people having different cultures.
The first aspect to point out is that visiting a foreign country broadens your experience strikingly. Being in a totally different society, makes you experience a number of things which have been in your mind as dreams for a long time, and you never thought to fulfill them in real life. To illustrate more, a person who comes to a foreign country chooses to visit places according to his personal taste. For instance, a college student is passionately interested in knowing more about another country's education system. He can take part in a course, for instance, to perceive how the students and professors interact with each other and may be impressed by their enormous facilities and entertainment centers. Not only can he take advantage of meeting distinguished professors, but also he can plan to suggest his university that they invite some professors to his country to convey their broad knowledge to their academic people.
A further more subtle point is that being in a foreign country enables a person to get familiar with people having various cultures. Living with new people, even for a limited time of a journey, helps the person view life from a different perspective. Even though people in his own country may have diverse cultures, in another country there are more peculiarities to be surprised with. For instance, you can make friends with people living adjacent to your hotel. You might notice they have customs and attitudes that sound odd to you to imagine. However, you can easily communicate with them, and you find a number of common interests in just a few hours of talk. They even introduce you to their friends, and you may notice they all have different nationalities while they have developed strong emotional ties which help them keep their friendship for good. This inspires you to extend your relationships with them in order to learn from each other.
To summarize, traveling to a foreign country extends your experience and creates new opportunities to make friends with people from there. It is high time we stopped overlooking the fact that your horizons will get drastically broadened by a foreign trip which can improve your lifestyle tremendously.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, may, so, while, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2264.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 447.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06487695749 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59808378696 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72058054252 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.514541387025 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 703.8 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.8992716905 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.157894737 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5263157895 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.42105263158 5.45110844103 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.128040866174 0.236089414692 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0503398318786 0.076458572812 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0327300701032 0.0737576698707 44% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.085748285563 0.150856017488 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0298107347734 0.0645574589148 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 11.7677419355 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 86.8835125448 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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