Do you agree or disagree that the ability to relate well to people is more important than study hard in school when it comes to success in future career?
I certainly disagree that success in future job is more rely on EQ or Emotional Quotient instead of hardworking. Even though in a job, the capacity to get along with people is very important, schooling influence for a person is lifetime. Without hardworking in school, it hardly for a person to cultivate good characters, habits and more importantly to gain knowledge that is necessary and paramount for future job.
To start with, studying hard in school cultivates students' good habits and characters. School is a place we develop our habits of doing things, from when we usually get up to how we set goals or make decisions. Hardworking students has discipline and regular heathy lifestyle, which is important to success in one’s career. According to a research, professionals who studied hard in school or who had great academic performance are usually willing to work hard and smarter comparing to those who cannot behave well in school. Employers are more inclined to choose those hard-working students applicants.
Secondly, studying hard in school cultivates students' ability to solve problems. Schooling life is not only about obtain various and bottomless knowledge, but we are learning how to deal with problems. We have to know what the shortcomings or difficulties lie, and work on it in order to get good grade. In a job, we also need to overcome difficulties through hardworking to achieve goals instead of depending on someone else doing the work. If we think that good relationships with others could guarantee our success, we should first realize that without hardworking and capability, we cannot even catch a chance.
Admittedly, it is necessary for us to improve skills when it comes to maintain good relationships with people and it is truly helpful for the career. But before any relationships could be beneficial to us, we need to create these relationships by showing what we can do or accomplish to gain people’s attention and trust.
To conclude, hardworking is the foundation to success not the networking. As we develop our discipline and characters and improve our ability to solving problems, we are forming the solid base to success in the future career.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 427, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[4]
Message: The pronoun 'someone' must be used with a third-person verb: 'does'.
Suggestion: does
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, secondly, so, well, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1846.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 359.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14206128134 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35284910392 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98928754697 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.520891364903 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 559.8 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.3535433022 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.588235294 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1176470588 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.70588235294 5.45110844103 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.263396136321 0.236089414692 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0884407061331 0.076458572812 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0516215480052 0.0737576698707 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145448814781 0.150856017488 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.052786581354 0.0645574589148 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.33 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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