do you agree or disagree children should play in outside with their friend than staying at home and playing with computers or cell phones

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do you agree or disagree? children should play in outside with their friend than staying at home and playing with computers or cell-phones.

Today, some children would like to play outside but some parts of children consume their leisure time in their home and their living rooms. There are some reasons that agreement on that statement which children playing outside.

First of all, there are not enough an oxygen in narrow places, and these types of places have tight living conditions. And, people who live in these areas have hard breathing, living or playing alone could cause more stresses and depressed than the second approach. In outside of places, there are much oxygen and people would be a good relax conditions. And, free-living conditions could provide the mental health.

Also, there are many social activities and facilities such as playing games, doing sports, meeting and conversation with their friends in outside of children's homes. On the other hand, there are more asocial conditions in inside of homes of people's because they always be alone when they doing any activities or sports. And, they may speak themselves regularly.

In addition, nowadays, all children have so many problems such as love problems, homework problems, etc. And, they have to solve these problems. Although, their families could figure their problems out they usually choose their friends.

Furthermore, almost all children cause more noise in their home because they play harshly and noisily, and their parents might need quite condition and they want to solve these a bad conditions. So, their family members urge their young play with their friend far from their homes.

Moreover, there is a security problem when children play outside with their friend, because there are so many a criminal person in any places. And, these types of people could impact badly and injury their children. If parents of children do want think a lot their offsprings they should not allow their children out.

In conclusion, although, there is a problem in approach which playing with their friend in outside, i definitely agree that statement. Because, children would be in outside for their mental, physical and social abilities.

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Average: 7.2 (2 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 263, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[5]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put after the verb 'be'.
Suggestion: be always
...inside of homes of peoples because they always be alone when they doing any activities or...
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Line 5, column 363, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...d, they may speak themselves regularly. In addition, nowadays, all children have...
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Line 7, column 146, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Although” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...And, they have to solve these problems. Although, their families could figure their prob...
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Line 9, column 283, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...with their friend far from their homes. Moreover, there is a security problem wh...
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Line 11, column 122, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'people', 'persons'?
Suggestion: people; persons
...d, because there are so many a criminal person in any places. And, these types of peop...
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Line 11, column 217, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...impact badly and injury their children. If parents of children do want think a lot...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, may, moreover, second, so, in addition, in conclusion, such as, first of all, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1754.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 335.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23582089552 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27820116611 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36136195791 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.519402985075 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 511.2 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.0507421967 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.3157894737 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6315789474 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.84210526316 5.45110844103 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.53405017921 154% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.326436955202 0.236089414692 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112136065008 0.076458572812 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0967621714043 0.0737576698707 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.189735959802 0.150856017488 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.089012777282 0.0645574589148 138% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.73 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200

Rates: 63.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.0 Out of 30
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