some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better? use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
Development of young adults is important for their families. Different types of methods are used for that. The best technique is giving free life to their children. But, some parents do not want giving independence to their offspring.
First of all, i think independence is necessary and it should been given to young for improving their abilities and good skills. In their free time, they always think alone, they usually make decisions themselves. Also, They often cooking meal, so they learn how do i cook well.Some of parent's young have to learn pay less money.There are many social activities in free life, people always could be with their friends. And then, they always be in good environments such as cinema, game house or etc. Almost all children want that interactions.
In contrast, some parent's want to separate their children off.Because they think that their children make bad decisions, and they often be in a failure. For instance, they may be use drug, alcohol or any bad behavioral things. For these reasons, family do not allow them for longterm periods.
Both giving free time and other approach have their advantages and disadvatages, bu i think the first pattern is the best for children.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, so, then, well, for instance, i think, in contrast, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 16.0 52.1666666667 31% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1012.0 1977.66487455 51% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 202.0 407.700716846 50% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0099009901 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.76996954942 4.48103885553 84% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6287827926 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 120.0 212.727598566 56% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.594059405941 0.524837075471 113% => OK
syllable_count: 298.8 618.680645161 48% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.3887611363 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.8461538462 100.406767564 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.5384615385 20.6045352989 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.69230769231 5.45110844103 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.290801182857 0.236089414692 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115252424549 0.076458572812 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0745474847009 0.0737576698707 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.192837389773 0.150856017488 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0658315226519 0.0645574589148 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 11.7677419355 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.48 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.59 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 86.8835125448 47% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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