Do you agree or disagree computer games is waste of time and children should not be allowed to play
There is much debate over whether or not playing a computer game is beneficial for children in high technological advances era. As far as I concerned that children are not permitted to use computer especially having the purpose of playing it. In this regard, they have confronted many difficulties such a lacking in physical activity and social isolation from their community as playing in a computer. I feel this way for two main reasons which I'll explore in the following essay.
To begin with, playing computer games has caused serious illnesses such as addiction, fatigue and obesity for children. Most of them don't concern their health because they think they are okay. In reality, it is not actually due to their bad habits of daily life. For instance, my brother is addicted to computer games named DOTA which is highly regarded among his peers. His health is totally possessed in poor condition even it affected his mentality and behaviour since three years ago when he has first played it.
Last month, my parents decided to go to the hospital because of my brother's health rapid degradation. he diagnosed that he has obesity which is maybe fatally dangerous for him and his abrupt aggression and depresses are highly adversely influenced by the progress of his illness. In the result, he cut down his time of playing computer games and he prefers to do an exercise regularly than sitting in front of his laptop for a long time.
Secondly, it may derive social isolation and even more, it gives them the chance to retrieve from their friends and family. Many computer games include violence and aggressive behaviour that are the impact directly on immature person's mentality and it can take their childhood memorable moments from them. In addition In the future, they have to become an independent person who is taking care of self and know how to earn money on this competitive society. if they didn't grow up enough in their childhood life they would become. that is the life way of the twenty-one century's lifestyle of all young people. Besides, recent researchers have indicated that social isolation has caused serious mental disorder such as depression and anxiety as I mentioned above. Consequently, it leads them to commit suicide by themselves on account of not serious problems.
To sum up, I firmly believe that children are not accessed to computer games which are totally hazardous to their physical and mental health are key to their well-being. Decisively, we always hope to our children the bright future and beautiful life, not the deadly harmful things.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, besides, consequently, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, well, for instance, i feel, in addition, such as, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2159.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 433.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98614318707 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56165014514 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59546692106 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.561200923788 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 680.4 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.7908385901 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.80952381 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.619047619 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.90476190476 5.45110844103 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.5376344086 235% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.163130631275 0.236089414692 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0493178291552 0.076458572812 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0659698103707 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101021960721 0.150856017488 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0423486682205 0.0645574589148 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.86 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 86.8835125448 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.