Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time is more important for happiness than the ability to make many new friends easily.
No one can deny the important role of friends in a journey of life. In this regard, people's opinions are divided as to whether long term friendship is less significant function in our happiness than the ability to make many new friends or not. It is my firm belief that kindship with old friends has numerous advantages on different aspects of people's living. For a number of reasons and I will develop these ideas in the subsequent paragraphs.
My primary reason is that relation with long-term friends are more reliable than new friends. Old friends over a long period of time show their loyalty and their kindness in various hopeless or successful situations. Some times we struggling in our minimum parts of our living and only someone reliable can help us. Someone, who cares about us. I believe old friends are such reliable individuals and coming for help as soon as possible. I have to admit that my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my own experience. Last year, I had accidence and went to the hospital for two weeks. I remember 3 of my old friend came to hospital and took care of me, but non of my new friends never came up to visited me. So, as you can see, I really consider maintain friendship with a small number of people over a long period has a strong bond than short-time relations.
Second, old friends know your habits and personality better than others. I mean, old friends soon become our best friends and they have enough knowledge about different aspects of our personality. After years of friendship probably your friends know what kind of foods you prefer or what kinds of entertainment give you a pleasant mood. For instance, last night I invited to the party that setting with one of my old friends she prepared some vegetable dishes for me because she knows I am a vegetarian person. So, in that party, I was so comfortable and happy.
In light of the above-mentioned reasons, I strongly believe the ability to maintain with old friends have a more critical role in our happiness than making new friends.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 114, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...is regard, peoples opinions are divided as to whether long term friendship is less significan...
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Line 3, column 119, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...an new friends. Old friends over a long period of time show their loyalty and their kindness i...
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Line 3, column 792, Rule ID: SMALL_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, use 'a few', or use 'some'
Suggestion: a few; some
...eally consider maintain friendship with a small number of people over a long period has a strong ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, really, second, so, as to, for instance, i mean, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1708.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 362.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.7182320442 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36191444098 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64409522969 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.546961325967 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 518.4 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.730925723 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.8947368421 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0526315789 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.42105263158 5.45110844103 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.345971174081 0.236089414692 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0985114448602 0.076458572812 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0969959232321 0.0737576698707 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.232260133595 0.150856017488 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0674706843605 0.0645574589148 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.68 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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