Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Advertising is the most important cause of unhealthy eating habits.
In modern days, advertisement is one of the most important way to affect decision of people but not in any realm of life. Even though many people the unhealthy eating habits among people attributed to advertisement; but, I, personally, subscribed to this idea that advertisement has a very minor role in the eating habits of people. Habits of human being shape in the routed of many factors as following, family education, each individual perspective, and condition of their lives.
In first place, human beings are significantly influenced by the behavior of their parents. As all we know, psychologically speaking, the most of Hemans' characteristics and habits shape during their childhood. It is hard for everyone to change such characteristic, formed in their minds from yeas before, are as a part of their personalities. Eating habits is one of those habits, which most children carry years. For example, my sister used to be a bank employee with long working time as her husband. They didn’t have enough time to prepare healthy food for their children who were always eating fast foods as their meal. Although, they are adults and have enough time to eating healthy home foods; but they are in habit of those unhealthy foods and can change their way.
Secondly, each individuals has a valuable blessing, wisdom. This blessing enable them to think about every matter in their life and compare the pons and cons of them. Advertising related to food is one of this matter. In these days all the people have enough knowledge to manage their eating habits. I think the people who eat unhealthy advertised food, behave in similar way without such advertisement, the only effect of advertisement for them will just be going from on unhealthy food to another. In fact, they aren’t care about their health, so this perspective of them, it isn’t matter to care about our healthy, is the cause of their unhealthy eating habits not more. For instance, my friend is a person who don’t matter to her healthy and body shape, is lazy. Two year before, a restaurant was built around his neighborhood. After a while, she started order food form that restaurant occasionally, but it didn’t pass long time that she was eating there every day. Her laziness and not being care about her health make her a person with unhealthy eating habit.
In sum, I think the advertisement isn’t the most important cause of unhealthy eating habits at all. The eating habit in people arise from their childhood lives, perspective, and the condition of their lives.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'from'?
Suggestion: from
.... After a while, she started order food form that restaurant occasionally, but it di...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, secondly, so, while, for example, for instance, i think, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2143.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 428.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00700934579 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.548423998 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7955595272 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.504672897196 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 658.8 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.4249702319 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.4090909091 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4545454545 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.45110844103 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.18267824797 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.062143645705 0.076458572812 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0687613250555 0.0737576698707 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138507406116 0.150856017488 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0400588774985 0.0645574589148 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.46 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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