Do you agree or disagree with the following statement After completing high school students should take at least a year off to work or travel before they begin studying at a university Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
After completing high school, students should take at least a year off to work or travel before they begin studying at a university.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Our modern life is much more complicated than three decades ago, and all students prepare themselves to get ready and find a better university. While some people believe that students should work or travel before starting study in the university, others agree with the obverse idea. Nevertheless, from my point of view, I think it is a worse idea that student to work or travel before studying at the university. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, students have limited time to spend for working or traveling because they have to finish their studying soon to get a job. Undoubtedly, job is very important and critical factor for living in the modern era. On the other hand, students can work or travel during studying in the university, and they don't need to spend a whole year for traveling or getting experience before starting undregraduate study. Moreover, by working for one or two year student will forget plenty of information, which is needed to get a good position in the well-known university. As a result, wasting time by working in part time or unappropriate jobs can be harmful for students' future because students will lose a lot of opportunities that will happend to them in the university. For example, ther are alot of part timejobs available for students in campus or even outside of campus, so students can get experience of working without spending their whole time. Therefore, students first priority is studying without stop, and they can get positive result from managing their time to both studying and working.
Furthermore, plenty of talented students after starting a career aftre high school stop thinking about university for ever. In fact, in a lot of developed countries young people can find a low salary job without struggling, which helps them to bacome an independent person. We all know that youth sometimes want to start a family when they see that they have rational income, and this led them to avoid going to the university. Consequently, by having a lot of young members who want to work rather than study, a community will face some major problems. Acadimic investment will soon decrease also the country lose a lot of talented students. Thus, students should not stop studying after graduation from high school because studying in the university will helps them to find a better job and achieve their goals.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that students should study in the university after completing high school. This is because students can study and work or travel in the same time, so there is no need to stop studying for a year, and also students who work after high school can stop studying for ever.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, furthermore, if, moreover, nevertheless, so, therefore, thus, well, while, for example, i feel, i think, in conclusion, in fact, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2257.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 461.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89587852495 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63367139033 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63699469891 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.472885032538 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 696.6 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.4825071021 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.789473684 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2631578947 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.5789473684 5.45110844103 194% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248320499025 0.236089414692 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0945388324256 0.076458572812 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.080998673476 0.0737576698707 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181726605984 0.150856017488 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0561418215936 0.0645574589148 87% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.74 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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