Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? All students should be required to study art and music in secondary
school. Use specific reasons to support your answer.
The most vital facet of life, which is accepted by everyone, is that they need to be educated. When it comes to the
education, there are different kinds of fields available to get the knowledge. I agree with the statement that all students
should be required to study art and music. There are some reasons for this.
Firstly, to study art and music will help students to focus on their study. In today's time, students have a lot of pressure
due to the hard subjects like math, science. If it would require for students to give their small amount of time to study art
and music, which help them to reduce their stress and they can easily focus on other subjects. For example, one of my friends was not able to concentrate on his study because there were a lot of lengthy subjects. When his school started to give some classes in art and music, then he felt more relax and was able to focus on other subjects.
Secondly, this will help students to create more job opportunities in their future. In the present time, there are a lot of
competitions for having a job. People cannot get a job easily and they struggle a lot. If students will learn about the art
and music, then there will be even more options for them find a job. For instance, if the student will learn music, then he/she can work in the music industry. Having knowledge of art, students can find a job in an art gallery.
Thirdly, art and music study can expand the student's knowledge. As we all know that art and music are the part of our
culture. These two gives a lot of information about the history and its culture. Nowadays, these cultures are being extinct
due to the lack of knowledge of these fields. The main objective is to broaden the student’s knowledge by providing them with the knowledge of art and music.
In conclusion, in this world, there are different kinds of people and everyone has their own opinion. Some people think that
to study art and music students will waste their time. Considering all the advantages, I strongly agree that students should
be required to study art and music.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, for example, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1735.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 375.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.62666666667 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40055868397 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38852664954 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 212.727598566 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.442666666667 0.524837075471 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 529.2 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.589262595 48.9658058833 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 75.4347826087 100.406767564 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.3043478261 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.52173913043 5.45110844103 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 15.0 4.53405017921 331% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.286168595641 0.236089414692 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105852305105 0.076458572812 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.133449766281 0.0737576698707 181% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136402985185 0.150856017488 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.109634168943 0.0645574589148 170% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.5 11.7677419355 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.28 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.0 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 86.8835125448 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.