If you could change one important thing about your hometown what would you change?

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If you could change one important thing about your hometown what would you change?

A small change can make anyone's life better. I live in a small town. There is no good school and college. If I will get a chance to change something in my town, I would like to change the education system. So that everyone would be educated.

Firstly, knowledge is vital to survive in this world. Without knowledge we cannot get a good job. In my hometown there is no good facility for study. School is the first part of life where we get the knowledge, where we learn about everything. If we do not get the knowledge properly in our school time, then we will have to struggle a lot.

Secondly, english is the national language in today's world. In my neighborhood, there is only one English medium school. The fee is so high in that school, which not everyone can afford. To survive in this world English language is pivotal. There are some people who get good jobs in IT firms but due to lack of knowledge of English they are not able to survive.

Moreover, schools are so far from the main town and there is no transport facility. Students face a lot of difficulties going to school. So sometimes students give up on their study. If there will be a good facility for students to send them to school,students will not face issue. Therefore, they will get more time for their studies too.

To sum up, "Knowledge is everything". In every aspects of life, school is the initial step where we learn the basic things. If we are not learning basic things in a proper way then we will not get good in any stage of life. As I do not see any progress for study in my hometown. So I would like to open some good schools and colleges. This would be the best for every student who has a goal in their life.

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Average: 3.5 (2 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...l step where we learn the basic things. If we are not learning basic things in a p...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1399.0 1977.66487455 71% => OK
No of words: 319.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.3855799373 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22617688928 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55786311056 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 212.727598566 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.48275862069 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 437.4 618.680645161 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 12.0 20.1344086022 60% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 24.1426051746 48.9658058833 49% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 53.8076923077 100.406767564 54% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 12.2692307692 20.6045352989 60% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 3.19230769231 5.45110844103 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0810441056402 0.236089414692 34% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0248485889162 0.076458572812 32% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0431654928202 0.0737576698707 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0550593830423 0.150856017488 36% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0629809451295 0.0645574589148 98% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 5.4 11.7677419355 46% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 76.22 58.1214874552 131% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.6 10.1575268817 55% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 7.29 10.9000537634 67% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.51 8.01818996416 81% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 86.8835125448 53% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 4.5 10.002688172 45% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.8 10.0537634409 68% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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