Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Attending a live performance (for example a play, concert, or sporting event) is more enjoyable than watching the same event on television. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
With the advance in technology, people have today a world of technological distractions right at their fingertips, including smartphones, social networking websites and televised entertainment. While some people believe that watching television is more stimulating than attending a live performance, others believe that going to live performances offers unique pleasure. In my opinion, being present at live exhibitions is more enjoyable than watching the same events on television. I feel this way for some reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First, attending a live performance has more emotional impact. For example, last year I went to the Imagine Dragons’ concert in the US and I was extremely impressed by their music. Their songs where so powerful that my body vibrated, and I carefully listened to them in ecstasy. If I had watched the concert on television, it would have been like listening to their works on YouTube. I would not have enjoyed the musical effects conveyed by their masterpieces: the TV speakers cannot transmit emotions with the same power as live music.
Second, attending a live performance makes people interact more with one another. If I followed a sporting event watching it on television, I would not have the opportunity to talk with my friends and thus I could be bored by the event itself, even though I like it. Going to a live performance is a way to meet people from many walks of life and talk to them. For instance, last summer I went to a classical concert in Turin and I sat next to an old woman who I discovered being a famous German soprano. If I had stayed home, I would not have had the chance to meet her. I am still in touch with her. Thus, going to live performances can help us building new relationships.
Third, attending a live performance is more enjoyable since there is no annoying advertisement. As many people know, televised entertainment has been more and more controlled by advertising companies. While you are enjoying your favorite soccer game, you are forced to watch advertising spots about something you are not interested in. In my opinion, advertisement makes television tedious and sometimes it has negative consequences on people. On the other hand, going to the stadium is always a funny and unforgettable experience.
All in all, in my opinion, be present at live exhibitions is better than watching the same event on television. This is because it transmits more feelings, because people communicate with one another and because there is no advertisement.
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, second, so, still, third, thus, while, for example, for instance, i feel, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2144.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 424.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05660377358 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53775939005 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06221459754 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.509433962264 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 686.7 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.5378787536 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.2173913043 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4347826087 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.08695652174 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.318002942762 0.236089414692 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0895482921813 0.076458572812 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0771708828983 0.0737576698707 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.179146763861 0.150856017488 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.035448261625 0.0645574589148 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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