Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Games are as important for adults as they are for children. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
With the development of technology, games have been becoming more and more popular: people can play right at their fingertips on some electronic devices, such as smartphones. While some people believe that only children should have the pleasure of playing games, others believe that everyone—adults and young people—should have the chance of having enjoyable plays. In my opinion, games are as fundamental for children as they are for the older people. I feel this way for two main reasons, that I will explore in the following essay.
First, games are important for adults since playing is a relaxing activity. Many people are tired after their job and playing games can alleviate stress and make them joyful. If people could not play games, they would be just focused on their work and this would cause sadness and depression. For instance, my father usually comes home late at night: he is exhausted since his job requires a lot of hard work, patience and diligence. In order to distract himself, he enjoys playing a soccer video game on the Playstation with me. He often says that if he did not have this leisure, he would feel overwhelmed by his job. Thus, playing games is a good stress reliever.
Second, games help people to develop communication skills and to enhance their culture . Lots of video games are set in the past and contain an introduction with history explanations, so children can learn more about the past. Doing like that, young people increase their knowledge and have fun at the same time. Besides, some games need more than one player and therefore people can play together and communicate one another. For instance, my cousin usually played a car racing game with his friends: in this way, he learned how to drive a car and how to deal with people. The ability to effectively interact with people was extremely appreciated during his job meetings: if he had never played that game, he would not have been so successful when he started working. Thus, people can improve their life if they play games.
All in all, this essay discussed why games are important for both young and old people. This is because playing games is a relieving activity and because it can increase culture and interaction skills.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, if, second, so, therefore, thus, while, for instance, i feel, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1866.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 380.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91052631579 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41515443553 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58789190375 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.539473684211 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 572.4 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.8671934441 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.3 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.177035608789 0.236089414692 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0697987603172 0.076458572812 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0666409827911 0.0737576698707 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125695058087 0.150856017488 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0273115512287 0.0645574589148 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.7 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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