Some people believe that success in life comes from taking risks or chances. Others believe that success results from careful planning. In your opinion, what does success come from? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Questions surrounding how people can be successful in life have been ongoing in the last years: nowadays companies have been hiring an increasing number of employees and as a consequence competition has been increasing. While some people believe that attentive organization is the key to success, others believe that taking risks or chances enhances the possibilities of having success. In my opinion, careful planning is important, but people have to take risks in their lives sometimes. Moreover, I believe that success does not come from chances. I will discuss my opinion in the following essay.
On one hand, success is the cumulative result of a lot of hard work and careful planning. Some people associate success with having a good job position: people cannot become successful thanks to a stroke of luck, but they need to achieve excellent expertise and show diligence and patience. My uncle’s life is a compelling example of this. He ran his own business 10 years ago hiring an employee: at the beginning his firm manufactured and sold just one type of product. After some good market decisions, his firm expanded and now it is extremely well-known all over the country. His success was not determined by luck: he carefully planned everything, and he did the choices that he thought they were the best. Thus, success does not depend on luck strikes.
On the other hand, people should risk in their lives in order to improve themselves. For instance, taking the gamble can save you from troublesome situations and it can help you to become more flexible. My university teacher took the risk of becoming a teacher instead of continuing her job, since she did not feel satisfied and she wanted to change life. If she had kept on doing that job, she would have felt dramatically depressed, even though she had a well-paid job. She has no regrets for her choice since after she left, the company she had been working for had a serious economic crisis. Therefore, taking risks in life can resolve problems and make you successful.
All in all, this essay discussed why success does not come from luck. This is because being successful is the summation of choices that derive from attentive planning, and because success can be accomplished risking.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, moreover, so, therefore, thus, well, while, for instance, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1890.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 379.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98680738786 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41224685777 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70446103342 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.572559366755 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 578.7 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.2957450517 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.5 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.95 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.95 5.45110844103 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.342496181673 0.236089414692 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.114354835278 0.076458572812 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.120764553723 0.0737576698707 164% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.216592668254 0.150856017488 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.108812107328 0.0645574589148 169% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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