Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Attending a live performance is more enjoyable than watching the same event on television.
Some people believe it is better to joining live activity instead of watching them by television, while others disagree. Personally, I prefer to attend live activities. Although there are some demerits like spending much money and time in compare with staying at home and watching television, but there are more advantages. This essay will support my idea by providing some reasons including social skill and heath in following paragraphs.
First of all, participating in activity instead of watching them on television will help to extend and evolve out social skills. One of the most significant merits of attending a live activities, is meeting different people and finding more fiends. Since most of the people who is participate there has same interesting, therefore we can find many points in common whit them. For instance, two years ago, I went to my favorite singer’s concert in Tehran (capital of Iran). I met a girl there. She was so beautiful and charm, thus we started to talk and had happy time together. After that we met each other for several times, and get married six months ago.
Furthermore, some of these activities such as playing football, go hiking, playing tennis, and dancing help to our body and mind healthy. In contrast, watching them on television is just entertain people for some hours. Most of our mental problems are stem from staying at home and isolating ourselves and cutting our communication with others. According to the recent research that published by American health institution (AHI), people who participate in live performance has happier and more interesting life than who watch them by television or other media.
In conclusion, in my point of view, taking part in live performance is better than staying at home and watching those by television. I supported this idea by representing some reasons and merits.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 184, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'activity'?
Suggestion: activity
... significant merits of attending a live activities, is meeting different people and findin...
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Line 2, column 281, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'participated'.
Suggestion: participated
...fiends. Since most of the people who is participate there has same interesting, therefore w...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, if, so, therefore, thus, while, for instance, in conclusion, in contrast, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1560.0 1977.66487455 79% => OK
No of words: 305.0 407.700716846 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11475409836 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17902490978 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80550386233 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 212.727598566 87% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.606557377049 0.524837075471 116% => OK
syllable_count: 487.8 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.4179813818 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.7647058824 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9411764706 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.05882352941 5.45110844103 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.189766028402 0.236089414692 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0569595182064 0.076458572812 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0597670414453 0.0737576698707 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125073355307 0.150856017488 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0453310866501 0.0645574589148 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.06 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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