People work because they need money to live. What are some others reasons that people work? Discuss one or more reasons.
People work because of different reasons, which earning money is one of the, but not all. I believe there are more reasons that are far more important than money. This essay will present some of them to support my idea in following paragraphs.
To begin with, working help people to feel fresh and spend their time and energy in safe and correct way. There is a famous expression which was quoted from our prophet, Mohammad, which said “working is the most significant benefit of man”. People amuse themselves by working, which is leads to benefit and banned people from prone to bad thing such as drug or alcohol addictive, burglary, and phycology disease. According to the recent research which was done by Michigan sociology institution (MSI), indicated that 85 percent of people, who did crime, confessed that the major reason was unemployment. In addition, they learn many things by working and meet different kind of people and know more about them.
Furthermore, people feel proud and satisfy their desire by working. Everyone has variety king of talent which needs to be bloom, and working is the best way for this. For instance, two years ago, I started to work in a flower shop as a florist. After a while, I realized that I have an amazing talent in creating communication with customers and memorizing flowers specifics. My supervisor was surprised when saw my rate of develop. Moreover, people feel proud by serving to human. For example, doctors, police officers, fire fighters choose their job just because of their interesting to help people and do not care money so much.
To sum up, from what I have discussed above, we can safely draw the conclusion that money in not only reason for working, whereas, other factors are important too. I mentioned some reasons above to support my idea.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, if, moreover, so, whereas, while, for example, for instance, in addition, kind of, such as, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1511.0 1977.66487455 76% => OK
No of words: 307.0 407.700716846 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92182410423 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5718752554 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 212.727598566 92% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.635179153094 0.524837075471 121% => OK
syllable_count: 468.0 618.680645161 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.1210575651 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.8823529412 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0588235294 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.88235294118 5.45110844103 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.37898679066 0.236089414692 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105613183253 0.076458572812 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0863038363246 0.0737576698707 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.218239473695 0.150856017488 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0754198427156 0.0645574589148 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.96 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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