DO you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television, newspaper, magazine, and other media pay too much attention to the personal lives of famous people such a public figures and celebrates.
Nowadays media attention to well-known life more than previous and try to capture all their life and report them in public. Personally, I disagree with this subject definitely. This essay will support my idea by providing some reasons and illustrating some demerits of this as follow.
First of all, most of media focus on well-known personal life and try to show different aspects of their treatments. One of the most significant disadvantages of this action is invading to their privacy and exhibit their life for public which leads to damage to their life and sometimes create trouble for them. In addition, most of these rumors are stem from the media to attract public attention to celebrities’ life. For instance, some years ago some media declare that Jennifer Lopez has an affair with one of her colleague. This news was boom suddenly and spread so fast, so that it became the most popular news for weeks. After this her husband request to get divorced and got the custody of her children. That was just a simple rumor that destroyed their life.
Furthermore, they became to symbol by media since media focusing on their life always. Since that, majority of people follow these famous persons, so they attention to every details of their life and habit. According to the recent researches which published by psychology media institution (PMI), 85 percent of teenager knew celebrities as their hero and wanted to become like them, so as everyone has flow in his or her life these faults which exaggerate with media can have bad effect on society and next generation life. Also this research indicate that in contrast to famous people who is under media’s attention, others have better and more comfortable life.
In conclusion, I totally disagree with paying much attention to famous people life by media. I used some reasons and provide an example to show its disadvantages such as invading privacy, expanding rumor, bad effect on adolescent future life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, if, so, well, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in contrast, such as, first of all, in contrast to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 15.1003584229 33% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1650.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 328.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03048780488 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25567506705 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63998337024 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 212.727598566 86% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.557926829268 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 521.1 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.9531066751 48.9658058833 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.125 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.25 5.45110844103 151% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.159772082137 0.236089414692 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.069648716089 0.076458572812 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0792679939132 0.0737576698707 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12163096468 0.150856017488 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0486287778218 0.0645574589148 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.77 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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