Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Because modern life is very complex, it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In this modern era, as technology evolved, people's daily lives have been bombarded by tons of works every minute of every day. Among people, youth, which are the step-stones of society, are more engaged with daily works. Some people believe that it's really central for them to schedule their programs; however, others think it's not. Without any delay, I subscribe to the former group due to a couple of plausible reasons elaborating in the subsequent paragraphs.
First of all, as technology accelerates the rate of humans' progress, youths need to organize their programs as well as possible in order to prevent missing opportunities. It is the essence of technology that facilitates humans' lives by flourishing labor-saving devices; on the other hand, it motivates people to work harder because they made them able to do more work per day, which approaches them to progress more than before. In this regard, managing a huge extent of tasks is practical just by having a plan. Therefore, youths must be able to manage and organize their programs during the day. Moreover, competition between people for gaining more success is heated, and people accomplish their duties more quickly. Preventing from lagging behind others through the way of progress is undoubtedly sophisticated. Thus, if youths are seeking success during their lives, they must be organized and have an obvious perspective to manage their tasks.
Secondly, diverse amusement activities for people are provided by technology, which makes the learning skills of planning more crucial for young people significantly. Juveniles are the pillars of society, and the progress of society corresponds to their progress. Nowadays, young people are overwhelmed by lots of hobbies that lead to waste their time. This oblivious to the wasted time threatens their future and pushes them away from their important goals. Take, an undergraduate student, as an example, seeking admissions to top universities, which takes huge effort to achieve. If she/he be engaged with play games and vain works, he/she never could gain this goal, and all of his/her dreams may be lost. But, with arranging a good plan, she/he could handle both playing and studying. Therefore, youths need to prioritize their tasks to prevent soaking in the sea of dead-end programs.
To sum up, bearing in mind the precis of all the mentioned reasons and details, it's fair to conclude that the ability of planning is important for youths due to two important factors including human's are able to do lots of tasks quickly, and technology increases the time-consuming programs which divert the youth from doing crucial activities. Also, It is worth mentioning that planning paves the way for progress, and all of us must be organized and have a certain plan to achieve our desirable lives.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 325, Rule ID: IT_IS[6]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...e their programs; however, others think its not. Without any delay, I subscribe to ...
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Line 5, column 593, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
...takes huge effort to achieve. If she/he be engaged with play games and vain works,...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, moreover, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, well, as well as, first of all, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2364.0 1977.66487455 120% => OK
No of words: 455.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1956043956 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61852021839 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71906950421 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 248.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.545054945055 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 716.4 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.7092517053 48.9658058833 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.571428571 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6666666667 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.28571428571 5.45110844103 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.154377981463 0.236089414692 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.045930518379 0.076458572812 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0390342881785 0.0737576698707 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102213657958 0.150856017488 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0216325247903 0.0645574589148 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.88 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.05 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 126.0 86.8835125448 145% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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