Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
No one can deny that making decisions is always a challenge for human beings, especially for youths. In fact, young people build their future with their decisions, making it more vital for them. Some people believe that today, they are more independent in decision making. On the other hand, others think that today, they are more reliant on their parents. I firmly subscribe to the first group opinion for two main reasons and will mention them in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, in today's advanced life, youth are exposed to various kinds of information and are familiar with diverse types of life. In the past, they just saw a limited kind of lifestyle because they were in touch with the finite people around them. Also, in many cases, they follow their parents' beliefs and imitate their living methods. Therefore, they preferred to live like their parents and were depended on their decisions. On the other hand, today, they can see lots of lifestyles by surfing the internet. This opportunity enables young age people to become aware and more informed of living methods. Thus, they prefer to choose the best lifestyle among what they see. Besides, they prefer to make decisions on their own and be the person they really want to be.
Secondly, young people were more respectful of their parents' ideas than today, and parents forced their children to do what they want. With this in mind, in the past, young children had to be like their parents and didn't try to make decisions independently. Accordingly, they didn't learn how to decide and how to realize the best choice. But nowadays, contemporary families have accepted that everyone is entitled to create his own future. In many cases, parents even provide every requirement for their children to build their future on their own. Also, parents let them select among different situations and finally become accomplished in decision making. Consequently, by this change in modern families' opinion, youth can distinguish between true and false, and eventually become potential determiners.
In short, today, youth are more independent in decision making than in the past. Two main factors are involved in this: the advent of the technology enables young people to find their desired life, and parents realized that they must allow their children to stay on their own feet.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, besides, but, consequently, finally, first, if, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, in fact, in short, kind of, in many cases, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1960.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 388.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05154639175 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43821085614 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42614360937 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.505154639175 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 599.4 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 12.0 4.94265232975 243% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.0542382507 48.9658058833 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 89.0909090909 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6363636364 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.59090909091 5.45110844103 158% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.384574644653 0.236089414692 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.124734626986 0.076458572812 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0880669049594 0.0737576698707 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.278821931801 0.150856017488 185% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0347208667409 0.0645574589148 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.71 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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